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Ariella Newheart replied to the topic I know it's awful XD But can I get some critique anyways? in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 9 months ago

@anne_the_noob14 Oh my goodness, I love this story and the variety of character names you used! Plus the dialogue is fantastic, and so is the concept. I concur with what Darth Pen said about weaving in character descriptions. Otherwise, I have but one question: is Bart the only guy in the whole book?! (besides the bullies, but I don’t think they count) 😛