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Oh my. I totally want to know more! I was so sad when I got to the last page.

At first I was curious about note but after reading about the Light Giving scene, I am more curious about the Dark Father and the Light World with the interesting ceremony/event. And then the note’s relationship to that.

Hmm… I would expect that there would be a consequence of the note. Like the town gets interrogated to find out who’s behind the presence of the note. OR that Malachi grabbed it when he caught her. OR the note fell into the pool of light

Later in the story I would expect maybe Evlynn to travel to the Light world or go on a journey? I guess it would depend on the note’s significance.

Sorry if that was more than you were looking for! 🙂

I would describe her as an independent, tries to take on everything herself, kind of girl. I don’t think she is one for adventures however, she wants to stand up for what she believes in even though it may scare her. And she worries quite a bit. There is also a caring touch to her – the way she acts around the old woman and her protectiveness over her brother. That is what I got from reading the story 🙂

There were a couple parts that I felt were more telling than showing but overall, really well done! And please…please write more! This story is meant to be told!