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@this-is-not-an-alien

OF COURSE WE’VE MISSED YOU!!

@Everyone:

Okay, good to know! (About your critiquing preferences)

@melancholicwriter

Okay, critique. Um, you never mentioned where the main character and the other guy are, or what the main character’s name is, or anything for readers to go on. Do you get into that later, since this is a prologue?

Also, yes, I know you acknowledged (In the character’s POV) that the “love at first sight” thing was cliche, but it feels a bit too cliche for me, y’know? The two didn’t even talk, and the guy was already holding her hand? It kinda seems like the two love each other just because of their appearances, nothing goes deeper than that…

So, yeah, main point: I felt confused reading it. (So sorry if that sounded blunt! It’s hard for me to honestly critique over the internet)