-
Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 4 months ago
1) If you want to include Jered’s dream, he should remember it. Don’t include details the POV doesn’t know.Jered sat up in bed, sweat glistening on his temple. He glanced at his clock,
2:01 AM.
He groaned, his head hurt.
Images of his dream flashed into his mind. He felt like it was supposed to mean something. But he couldn’t imagine what.
He rolled over and went back to sleep.
Better?
Article Categories
