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@katja-r

Great job! I love how you’re piling all this guilt on Alyce. Poor girl. 😉 Can’t wait to see what happens next!

I noticed a few little mistakes, but nothing you wouldn’t notice if you read over it I think. Similar to the things Beth pointed out in the previous chapter.

It did take me a minute to remember who Ranwick was, mainly because in the previous chapter you had called him “Mr. Ranwick” instead of just Ranwick. Idk, just a little thing I noticed.