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@nuetrobolt

Hi, I got to chapter 6? I hope my commenting didn’t seem too heavy, because I love the story already!

There were a few things I commented on that I wasn’t sure about, but word flow could be better.

Please remember: This isn’t a judge of your writing, I’m just trying to see if there’s a better way to put it.

I always feel bad when I beta read and people take the comments as a judge of their writing. Your story’s really good, and I’m enjoying it a lot! I love Joel, he reminds me of Hiccup Horrendous Haddock the third. XD