February 23, 2020 at 9:52 am #107089
Would anyone like to Alpha/beta read my novel Curtain’s Edge?
@anne_the_noob14 This is the novel I was writing during NaNoWriMo. You asked me to tag you for Beta reading.
@h-jones You probably don’t remember this, but a long time ago you asked me to tag you when I was accepting Betas. Since my book has changed titles and the plot has changed a lot, but here it finally is. I’m tagging you if you’re still interested.
Book One of The Ambassador’s Curtain (Two books)
I would prefer for Alphas to read it by the beginning of April, but if that is not possible, please let me know, and I’ll still add you. The first draft is already entirely written.
Content Warnings: Violence, injustice, a bit of magic
Critique Needed: Search for plot holes, confusing parts, character gaps, parts that drag or are boring, your favorite parts
Length: 263 pages, font size eleven. Roughly 122,000 words.
Towering over the dragon-infested jungles of Dragamere rises a wall of white-water droplets, a massive waterfall, that seems to have no source. The villagers of Dragamere call it the White Curtain.
But the White Curtain, standing unchanged for hundreds of years, is not the cause for the rumors striking fear into the hearts of the villager of Dragamere. Not even the foreign bodies that have been found washed up in the rivers fed by the Curtain are the cause for the fearful rumors. No, these rumors seem to be about something that could alter the fate of mankind forever: an uprising of the dragons.
For years, the people of Dragamere have lived in fear of the threat of united dragons. Their fears have led them to take drastic measures, including sending young boys out to kill dragons and removing those who can’t. Weaker humans are considered only useful for sacrificing to dragons.
But on the brink of a dragon uprising, the human population of Dragamere is weaker than ever, its members cruel and isolated towards each other.
The small town of Elkfoot is no different. However, out of this town, two people will arise who will change the history of not only Dragamere, but lands unknown. Besides this, the village contains a powerful relic, bringing the town into the path of a dangerous thief.
Joel is a weakling, hiding his scars behind isolation and trickery. But when even this fails to protect him, he receives unlikely aid – from a dragon, Vromidon. Vromidon claims Joel is more than just a weakling boy. Joel doesn’t know what to think. Neither realize how much their lives are about to change.
Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. PetersonFebruary 23, 2020 at 11:39 am #107094
@nuetrobolt Ah! Wonderful!! Thank you for remembering me!
*whistles* Wow. 122,000 words… *gets wishful look in eyes as I look at my own doc*
*coughs* Um. Yeah. Just ignore that. Let’s see… *reads over synopsis* Dragons!! Yay!! (I love dragons 😀 ) I should be able to beta-read it this week and make comments 🙂 Any particular deadline you want for beta-reading?
“Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"February 24, 2020 at 2:05 pm #107203
The same deadline for alphas and betas. I wasn’t really sure which word to use, so I just used both.
Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. PetersonFebruary 25, 2020 at 8:21 pm #107372
Ok! Also, how would you like me to do comments? I can try to write them up on a piece of paper as I come across them and note beside them the page and paragraph?
“Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"February 26, 2020 at 1:06 am #107386Ariella Newheart@ariella-newheart
@nuetrobolt Your synopsis has drawn me in! I would love to beta-read, but I don’t know if I could dedicate a huge amount of time to it until Spring Break in April. If that changes, I’ll let you know. 🙂
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I just wanna say that your story sounds really awesome (and I’m like, really picky). I’m super busy but if I have any time later on I’ll come back to this and give beta reading a tryFebruary 26, 2020 at 9:04 pm #107439February 27, 2020 at 4:47 pm #107487
*opens doc* Did you mean to let me have editing mode? I don’t mind lol but just making sure that’s purposeful.
“Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"March 3, 2020 at 3:25 pm #107981
That’s not purposeful. Sorry.
Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. PetersonMarch 3, 2020 at 3:33 pm #107982Urwen Starial@urwen-starial
I’m interested. May I?
“Tears sparkle like fallen stars, the world at our fingertips, We didn’t know, It wasn't happiness.March 3, 2020 at 7:47 pm #108038
Just finished it! It’s awesome!! 😀 I kinda feel like I didn’t comment much, and so wasn’t really helpful lol but I commented on everything that popped out at me, besides nit-picky things like spelling/grammar.
I WANT TO READ MOOORRRREEEE :'(
“Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"March 3, 2020 at 9:00 pm #108045
@urwen-starial Yes, please do!
@anne_the_noob14 I just added more to the docs! The entire first half (Part One: In the Shadow of the Falls) is now in the document. Are you “Snack Thief, Lover of Owls and Books”?March 3, 2020 at 10:59 pm #108053
@nuetrobolt YAY!! 😀 😀 Yep, that’s me! 🙂
“Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"March 4, 2020 at 11:05 am #108058Urwen Starial@urwen-starial
Hi, I got to chapter 6? I hope my commenting didn’t seem too heavy, because I love the story already!
There were a few things I commented on that I wasn’t sure about, but word flow could be better.
Please remember: This isn’t a judge of your writing, I’m just trying to see if there’s a better way to put it.
I always feel bad when I beta read and people take the comments as a judge of their writing. Your story’s really good, and I’m enjoying it a lot! I love Joel, he reminds me of Hiccup Horrendous Haddock the third. XD
“Tears sparkle like fallen stars, the world at our fingertips, We didn’t know, It wasn't happiness.March 4, 2020 at 6:57 pm #108089
@anne_the_noob14 Thanks for all your comments! I’m glad you like it!
@urwen-starial It was great! Thanks! No problem about the heavy editing. Just a note, though, I am writing a second draft, I just haven’t been updating it into the docs. (Maybe I should). I’m taking care of grammar and sentence flow in there. I’m more looking for the things I put in the description at the top of the post. Thank-you so much for your edits, though! You caught a couple things I missed in my second draft! Don’t feel the need to point out all the grammar (unless you want to!).
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