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  • Hope Ann replied to the topic The Songkiller’s Synopsis!!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 6 months ago

    @daeus-lamb Nice! The one critique I have is the first line.

    Failing to save her fourteen years ago haunts his memory,

    The ‘her’ is vague and not explained and threw me because I was expecting to be told who she was. If it was even just a generic description like ‘sister’ or ‘one he loved’ or… something better than that. XD But something, I think it would be better.

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