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@quinn-ofallon Here’s what I found.

If it wasn’t for the full moon above, the sprawling pagoda-like building would cast the whole courtyard in shadow, dwarfing the barracks lined on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

Change to:

dwarfing the barracks on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

or

dwarfing the barracks lining either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

A decent enough plan, but with one pitfall–every heretic tries it, which means I have extensive practice cutting off anyone who tries that route.

I would split this into two sentences rather than one joined by an em dash.

As I run, I strain for a glimpse over the battlements..

(There are two periods here)

Panice tightens my throat.

“Panic”

And that’s all! 🙂