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Hello!

This is a poem I wrote a while back. I really like it, but I don’t know if it’s any good. If you guys don’t mind looking it over and letting me know:
1. Do you feel like it makes sense? Does it have enough meaning/cohesion, or is it too jumbled?
2. What are some spots that need polishing, and how should I go about doing that?

Thank you all so much!

Sundrops

Sun melting on a page like paint
dripping where a sopping brush would place.
It’s like teardrops leaking from my page;
lines of sadness I cannot erase.

Sadness, glory only by design
Placed by skillful artist can be felt
As a crying joy when it is seen
Even as our own hearts slowly melt.

White is not so bright until you see
Blackness as the backdrop of the page.
Then it glows much brighter than the light
Hypnotic dancing on its blackened stage.