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  • Steward of the Pen replied to the topic Fantasy Novella Alpha Readers Needed! in the forum Critiques 7 years, 8 months ago

    @taylorclogston

    Well, there was definitely some foreshadowing of the twist of Jacob bringing back the sun instead of Artorius in the final labyrinth scene where Artorius is confronted by the Undying One about how his unwillingness to put aside his right predicts that he won’t be able to bring back the sun. I’m pretty sure I noticed foreshadowing in the other labyrinth scenes (and possibly in a few scenes near the beginning as well), but I can’t remember exactly where.

    I’m sorry I won’t be able to help with the next one. I’ve got a ton on my plate, so I really shouldn’t make any more commitments. But I’m glad the feedback for the first was helpful!

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