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@jzhurricane

Hey! I finally read Dreamchaser! I think it’s great! It’s definitely got a lot of potential!

So, I was a kinda confused in the beginning, because of the switching between real life and dreaming. I would clarify when Sol is awake and dreaming a bit more.

It’s also a bit… random. You jump back and forth between scenes so quickly that that’s also confusing. I’d try to connect things better and go between scenes more smoothly.

I didn’t pay too much attention to the grammar issues. I wasn’t really looking for them, but I did suggest edit fixes for some of them…

But over all you did a good job!