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Great thoughts. I’d be happy to insert a few comments. I don’t have time tonight, but if you don’t mind waiting until tomorrow, I can offer some edits.

Just one thought off the bat on my first reading, there were several sentences I didn’t quite understand exactly what you’re trying to say, simply because I think you tried to say several different things in a very short amount of text. It all felt very rushed. Go through and find some ways you can hash some things out. What exactly does this disorder mean in your life? Maybe mention a few kinds of food you can’t eat. At what point during your Thanksgiving did you realize that your focus was all on you? Describe that a little more. Be specific. Use specific examples. 🙂 Hope that helps. I’ll add in a few more notes on the document itself tomorrow. 🙂