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Here are the comments I have on your poem.  Lovely work, by the way!  What I have to say is bolded. 🙂 Hope it makes sense.  Where you looking for any specific critique?

Weeping Willow, why

do you wallow in your wailing

while the wondrous world is waking?

The wren warbles wistfully

as the wind whispers warmly

while it wanders west.

 

Weeping Willow, watch

for warmly walks the Woman.

We were well to name her Wisdom

for she wallows not in worry

but wears wings of wisteria.

She is wishing with the wistful

and wary of the whiner.

Her voice wedded with the warble

of the warmly whistling bird.

 

Weeping Willow, listen

for the wayward worker wasted

all the worthy weight of wonder

as he washed his wail in whiskey (–) optional, just for rhythm, to make us pause before the next line.

and worshiped his own whining.

 

😀 wonderful!