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@h-jones Oh, wow.  I love the sway of this piece, so chilling.  Yes, I think you did capture the mysterious feel.
Also, I read the line “worm into dreams” and at first I shuddered, because that word “worm” is so expressive and kind of creepy.  I wasn’t sure if I like it at first, but after reading the poem through a second time, I think adds so much to the mood.  And the ending is very well done – leaves me wanting more.
One thing that bothered me the tiniest bit was the first set of lines, 1-4.

The moon is high,

the sea is deep;

you say goodnight and

drift to sleep.

You have this beautiful sentence here, but line three has an extra syllable, whereas line four loses one.  When I read it, “and” just seems like it should be tagged onto the beginning of the fourth line instead of at the end of the third.  But that’s just a nitpickle.  I think the mood is very well done and so lovely.  I’d love to see more from you ^.^