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I agree with Ella about the close repeats and formatting.

All I “know” of operating rooms comes from TV, so please be patient =P First, would anyone bother thinking or saying “ECG machine” instead of just “ECG?” Second, would the MC be required to formally call time of death, or is that just a TV thing?

Why is this the patient who gets to the MC? Has she never lost a patient in all her years of practice before, has she never lost a child, was this the third child in a row, or what?

I don’t know that the angel bit is helpful to the story. Her being present for what seems like an identical situation to her previous failure is miraculous enough without injecting what feels like whimsy into a story about children dying. And if you do keep the woman letting her know in the beginning, even if you keep the “you’re a doctor, aren’t you?”, I strongly suggest you remove the “you think she was an angel?” stuff from the end. The reader already understands that.

I think a the more powerful end point is with her going into the OR for the second time with us not seeing the result, because it seems to me that the point of the story is that she picks herself back up and takes another step despite not knowing if she’ll succeed or fail, not that giving it another is rewarded by success.