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Hey y’all!

I’m writing this short story for a contest, and I need some fast feedback. I know it’s pretty rough in some spots (due to rushing to even get all of it together) but the deadline is literally upon me. I have one day to edit.

What I want to know:

1. Are my characters compelling and believable?
2. Does the plot seem solid?
3. Are there places you think absolutely NEED more description and depth? (Again, I only have a literal 24 hour day to finish this thing.)
4. What was your favorite thing about it?
5. What confused you?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/19AaMwpkzRrNNVe7wsjczcMVR_klZZD0nlz639XsP3Xc/edit?usp=sharing