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My only problem with this story is that it doesn’t describe the sunset a lot. It mostly describes the life the girl was living in, the only description we get of the sunset is it is a flaming beetroot, with streaks of cheese from a pizza coming out of it.

I am not quite sure a beetroot would be the best descriptor for a sun.

The only reason I would leave it like that is because I liked the ending.

A flaming beetroot crashing into the earth. Now, that’s something you don’t see every day

What does everyone else think?