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I, David replied to the topic Long Talks About Short Stories in the forum General Writing Discussions 7 years, 8 months ago
When I first came to my office in London, I noticed him…how one gentle look was more than a million words of comfort.Sweet story, @libby! 🙂
I liked the narrative. It felt homey, like a classic fable to be read by the fire. Or something like that, haha; I live in Florida, fire doesn’t exist here
most of the time.It does feel somewhat choppy, however. The flow kind of bounces about before figuring out where it’s going and saying what it wants to say. It does get there and thus of course still works, but it could be straighter and smoother if given just a little more attention. That, and it would also benefit from a bit more character development, so we could understand the people’s characters a little clearer.
Overall, it was really nice and enjoyable. Kindness/10
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