“I have no doubt that magic of a sort was used to bring us here, but power of this magnitude is beyond any on my world. Unless the nature of magic itself is different on your worlds – which it might very well be – I suspect it to be beyond any there as well. Though…” an inquisitive grin arose on Glenesh’s face,…[Read more]

Hey, sorry for the long wait for the reply, life has been nuts for me lately.

Yep, it should also be noted (though it rarely is from what I have seen) that he also makes special note of food at times. Both food and song are such a large part of a culture that we are blind to it until we go into another culture see how they are…[Read more]

Hey, I wanted to hear Lona and Sky’s response before continuing, and then life just got crazy for me. I am still invested though 🙂

Pretty much, unless you are Tolkein, then half of your story is song anyway XD.

Yeah, every few years California decides to spontaneously combust. Never had to evac myself, but I was right below the line that did, and I have seen the fires crawl across the mountains right next to us.

I have a really hard time…[Read more]

While I appreciate your concern, your energy here is misplaced. This is a forum for Christian writers to write about characters – characters that can encompass the entire scope of humanity. This is not a forum dedicated to Christian relationship advice, nor was such advice asked, do not turn this into something it isn’t.

You are very welcome ^_^ I am glad you found it helpful.

haha, fair enough!

Kylo Ren is a good example of how not to write a redemption arc, lol. And I love it when I give people ideas XD

You know, that’s ok. That is what this forum and the editing process are for. We are all human, with our own…[Read more]

haha, I’m glad you enjoy it! I was looking through the pictures on my computer to try and find one I liked and I saw this one and knew it was perfect XD

Isn’t that what stories are, just with a lot more context? XD

It may sound weird, but I kinda get it. Sun for so long gets boring. I had a teacher in highschool who was originally from New York, and she couldn’t understand how excited and energized her students got when there was rain, lol.

That’s good! Honestly, I am much…[Read more]

Writing music is still very much a form of writing. The stories that songs tell are much more compact than books, but that does not make them less valid by any means.

“In the winter here in Northwestern Ontario where I live, we skate and play hockey all the time. My brother and I usually play hockey with our friends at the outdoor…[Read more]

“However I don’t want to be put in a situation where the readers have long figured who he actually is or when it is revealed, it doesn’t have an effect on them at all. I guess what I’m asking is can something like this work? I know that there is secrecy and dishonesty between them, which would be a problem for the act…[Read more]

“However I don’t want to be put in a situation where the readers have long figured who he actually is or when it is revealed, it doesn’t have an effect on them at all. I guess what I’m asking is can something like this work? I know that there is secrecy and dishonesty between them, which would be a problem for the act…[Read more]

Thank you 🙂

Thanks. And yeah, I’ve been doing that too.

Hey all, I am wondering if my posts are going through/you can see them. The site has been going crazy the last little while and I don’t know what works and what doesn’t.

Hey, so here is the last part of my critique 🙂

“Pain rocketed up my spin, through my nervous system, and into my brain. I shrieked, falling to my knees as I clutched my head. Suddenly, I was pulled backwards by a rough force. Agony sliced through my forearms as they were suddenly pinned to the wall on either side of m…[Read more]

You are welcome, though I don’t feel like I actually answered your question, lol. Now that I know what direction you are going with it, I have a lot of thoughts about it, if you are interested.

Wow, that is really cool. I have only browsed a little but that is freaking awesome! Thank you for the link 🙂

Yeah, a bunch of posts got deleted and some peoples messages stopped showing up for a day.

As for games, I am in a similar boat. I think the last triple-A game I played new was Skyrim, since then I mostly stick to old games I know I like or smaller releases on steam every once and a while. Lack of time has a way of refining our palates…[Read more]

“PS. I have been having some trouble with one particular narrative I want to include, but now I’m not so sure a…[Read more]

Hey, I think I am ready to finish the critique. If you still have the emails of my messages would you mind posting them back for me? I want to get back to where I left off. 🙂

Because I am writing Glenesh in 3rd person, ya’ll will see certain things without context. But if you have any questions about it, feel free to ask 🙂

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Providence has a sense of humor. In comedic timing, as the last words were leaving Glenesh’s mouth, an aggressive “Who are you?” sounded to his rig…[Read more]

No worries 🙂 my week has been rather busy, and after all the posts got deleted last week, I wasn’t eager to post more anyway.

@lonathecat @rebekah12

Also, I’m not really sure what the ground rules are here. I don’t want to direct other’s characters, even if it is as little as having them arrive in a particular room (or who if anyone…[Read more]

That is some good news at least.

HEY, THIS ONE POPPED UP! FYI, you should have my messages in your email (maybe in your junk section) if you have email notifications turned on. I didn’t think I did and the popped up there anyway.

Awesome, thanks. 🙂 And I hope so too, it was probably over 6k words…

Speaking of which, @irishcelticredflowercrown, I have the last portion of saved to a word document, so if you need me to post it again I can.

Yikes, that is really discouraging. Is there a way we can contact someone? I had a lot of writing critique that just got lost…

@rose-colored-fancy

Hey, so something really weird has happened, a bunch of our posts are gone, and looking throughout the forums, it looks like a lot of posts are gone. It looks like the the entire forum got reset to a week ago, is this on my end? are you gals getting this too?

Awww, your character sounds lovely, it will be exciting to meet her 🙂

Thank you 🙂

I think the edge the Victorians have is A) they had years of (less) blemished history to draw from and B) they decided to wear it. Not only that, but have grand paintings of them wearing it. lol.

Don’t know who Turtle is, but it sounds like fun 😀

Yeah, I know what you mean.

Those scenes are great, brings i…[Read more]

Hey, sorry for the wait, I had a really long week.

I read what you wrote and I really liked it! It is engaging, tense, and makes me excited to read more!

There were a few things that took me out of the story a little bit. First – and this really could just be a ‘me’ thing – introducing a fantasy setting and then a…[Read more]

haha, thank you! I can’t say I pictured David Attenborough while writing it, but I will definitely take the compliment XD

Really? I didn’t know that was a thing. I mean, yes, sun is good for you, just wear sunscreen, lol. And if they still don’t want to, you can tell them that I personally discovered that if you…[Read more]

Oh, I am sure. Especially because it was Greece, and as we know well today, no one can spin a yarn of absolute BS better than a young philosopher or starving artist. lol.

That sounds like a fun premise, and if she wove in actual characters for middle-grade, hats off to her! It is a delicate balance making characters both…[Read more]

No worries 🙂 https://storyembers.org/groups/fantasy-writers/forum/topic/prologue-to-my-wip-book-series/

Yeah, California is expensive… Beautiful country with diverse biomes… but an absolute pain to live in, lol. Also, if you get sunburned in Ireland, USE SUNSCREEN HERE. Fortunately, you can get SPF 70+ stuff that…[Read more]

If you can’t find it, I can always link it 🙂

The authors’ works sound very interesting, I might just check them out.

Very cool! I’m an American from sunny southern California, but most of genetics are Scottish/Irish and I have the sunburns to prove it, lol.

Your magic system sounds a bit like Full Metal Alchemist,…[Read more]

Pleased to meet you as well 🙂 and thank you! If you are curious, my prologue/creation story is in the Fantasy section of the forums (it might be burred at this point though, lol)

I haven’t heard of them, what kind of books do they write?

Irish and Celtic mythos are fun to draw from, and contrasting that with what…[Read more]

HAHA “Well, you see, we don’t know what that skull is, so the black blob really is just our fear of the unknown which we must confront with courage and logic.” – that potter trying to get his piece sold, probably.

Never heard of that book, is it any good?

I only ever read the first book, and it was so long ago I…[Read more]

I actually didn’t know about that before, lol. I don’t know if it was more or less creative that they just stuck the skull on a black blob instead of creating some goofy looking monster to try and make it work (like the rest of humanity since forever XD )

Oh, man, then you might really like this video/channel,…[Read more]

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‘Hujor’: another word he did not recognize, and Castle Ironstorm was a place that did not exist in Epoch. Very well then, he would put this as delicately as he could to the young woman…

“No, I am not from this place. Where I am from, I am a mage of no small significance.” There was no pride in the voice, but he…[Read more]

Very cool. Reminds me of the Gamers movies (made by Zombie Orpheus/Dead Gentleman Productions). If you haven’t seen them, I would HIGHLY recommend them, they are hilarious.

Thanks you 🙂 and fun confusion is the best confusion, especially as she is only half wrong XD

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One moment there was nothing, another, she simply appeared in a strange pose and with a confused expression. There was no flash or display, no backlash or collateral side-affects from the capricious nature of magic. The lack of any…[Read more]

Thank you very much! ^_^ Yeah, a lot of posts here only sorta talk about it, if you are interested in reading a little, I posted the prologue in the Fantasy forum.

Literally laughed out loud at Oxford commas. XD

Oh, fun! Tabletop or videogame?

HA! we all need inspiration from something, right? Or how about all those mid to late medieval paintings are that are just monks taking out their frustration with their gardens being eaten by snails by depicting them as monsters being slain my the local knights.

It is weird. Learning about languages was a seriously brain…[Read more]

The concept with this character, and the challenge I am currently facing in my writing, is portraying a world and humanity that is yet to fall. As you can imagine, the true scope of that reality is beyond my capability to display, but…[Read more]

You are very welcome ^_^ inspiring someone else to write is a very high compliment.

As for where to start… I would start with reconnecting to what ever drove you to write this story in the first place (this might sound weird, bear with me a moment). It could have been just for fun (nothing wrong with that), or maybe it was…[Read more]

My favorite version of this was along a main road out of Egypt (I don’t remember specifically where). There was a spot that was just covered in etched writings and hieroglyphics from all over the place. They were wondering what cultural or religious significance this bare patch of rocky cliff face just off the road could…[Read more]

I want to know what Hot Guy looks like: just how hot is Hot Guy? 😉 Is he a built jock blonde with long flowing locks and eyelashes that make women jealous? Is he a carefree redhead? Maybe a little skinny with ears that poke out just a bit too much for him to be taken seriously, but having a sense of humor that leaves entire…[Read more]