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Alright, Allison. I just read your story.

It was pretty good, though there’s definitely room for improvement. Your characters have strong personalities, and I like the way you kept on repeating that phrase, ‘Murderer, monster…’.

Your story flowed a little too fast for my taste, but I got all of the details. After all, it’s just a short story. i think if expanded you could really do something with it.

Your style is a little bit choppy, but I think that with more practice, it’ll improve.

I like the plot. Very well-rounded plot. Theme is also imbedded deep in there.

And…that’s all I have to offer.