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Jane Maree replied to the topic {2018 – Week 3} Getting thoughts and Character Voice into 3rd Person POV in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 8 years ago
Sure you can! As long as it includes the elements I was talking about, then that’s totally fine. 😀
Aahh, very nice. You did a great job at the indirect thoughts.
A little note–that last line slipped out of it a bit, and I couldn’t get into the story quite as much. More indirect thoughts could help with that too. 😉
She wondered why the manufacturers had to make it so annoying but came to the conclusion that she might not wake up if it was more pleasant.
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Why would any right-minded manufacturer make an alarm sound that annoying. Although…that was kind of the point. She let out a long sigh.












