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WOW. I absolutely love it! Beautiful wording. Great characters. And just pure sweetness between the two characters <3 My only critique would be to further develop the characters – particularly the second one. The second character seems to be only defined by what he isn’t – he isn’t a daydreamer or a writer. It would be nice if there were a little more detail about him and his own story. Also, most of what is shared from the second character’s POV is about the first character. It would be nice if you had character #1 express how they felt about character #2 – this could be another way to add depth to character #2. Once again, excellent job!