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  • Coggleton replied to the topic Fantasy Novella Alpha Readers Needed! in the forum Critiques 7 years, 3 months ago

    @taylorclogston

    So far work’s been keeping me busy so I’ve only read up to page 14. Thoughts:

    – What’s Circe doing in the prologue reminiscing kindly on Artorius’ plight? I thought she hated his guts at this point.

    – Even though the sun isn’t blinding to look at, it seems like it would be a nice touch for Artorius to be squinting as an influence from his fusion dance with Timothy. Maybe a sign of burgeoning humility?

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