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@lin Aww, it’s sad that no one here would be able to understand the poetry you write in your own language. It must be beautiful. 🙂

And I can’t imagine trying to rhyme and work out a poem in a different language… so wow! Good for you!

I really like this poem! It’s so child-like – so simple – but beautiful: the kind of poetry I adore! 🙂

The one thing I’d suggest is to work on the meter. I’m not sure if it was intentional, but for the most part it’s very consistent! There are a few places I stumbled over though. Do you want me to point them out?

This is a great poem and I can’t imagine how lovely it would be as a book with your illustrations. 🙂