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Taaka Merespinner replied to the topic November Critique Piece! in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
@sarah_inkdragon,
Great. Corvus. Of. Darktan. I want to read more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Your writing seems to be a lot like Jenifer A. Nielson.
I loved it, except for the whole “god of war” and the Middle Eastern style. It gets a little weird for me, and if I didn’t know you were a Christian, I probably wouldn’t read it.
Alrighty: Hook, yes. Yes. YES!!!!!!!
Characters: Answer the same as the first.
Pacing: Way better than mine. Answer same as the first and second.
Description: Pretty good, but I think in some ways, it could be a wee bit better.
Thanks for mentioning me! I feel very honored.
Post more, milady. No, I’m Milady. Post more, m’gel. Much better, Taka. Much better.












