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@devastate-lasting

Well, I better do this before I have to leave for the weekend. XD

• Style–I personally love your style, as it’s very similar to my own style and the styles I enjoy reading. It’s almost simplistic, but it carries a lot of weight, if you know what I mean. There’s a lot of depth to things in the way you write it, and I personally love that. 😉
• Characters–Eleven was a very interesting character. I am a sucker for anti-heroes, villains, and such, and I love a sad backstory. (Yes, I know, I’m mean. lol) But Eleven was cool character. Even when you warned me that he wasn’t a good guy at the beginning, I still felt sorry for him when he did what he did.(No spoilers for those who have not read it yet. XD) In fact, I liked him so much I’d love to see more of this story. I’m going to second Warren though and say that maybe a little more description on Eleven’s part would be good, unless you’re intentionally going for a vague feel.
• Setting–I really liked the setting, and I’m not squeamish person, so none of the blood or anything bothered me at all. It was an entertaining setting, though I would work a little more on describing the character’s actions a little more. I got a little lost a few times as to exactly what was going on.
• Plot–the plot was very interesting for me. I love plots like this. One thing I might note is that the ending was little confusing–I never really got if it was an actual like video game and Eleven’s IRL self was like shutting it down, or whether is was like the Hunger Games and the game itself was an IRL game, or not… so I would clear that up just a little if I was you. Other than that however, I loved it. 😉

Great job! This was a really interesting story to read, and I wish there was more. XD