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@libby, here are adverbs that I noticed that might could be changed.

patting lightly–tapping

wearily struggled–maybe you could show us he’s weary

breathing heavily–gasping for breath, taking long breaths, etc

abruptly stopped–halted

breathed laboriously–again maybe show us its laborsome.

I will say that this story was really good and that I loved the descriptions you used.

BTW, I love the quote you have from C. H. Spurgeon on the bottom of your posts.