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@sarah-inkdragon, I did really get to finish my reply last time because we had guests come in right when I was in the middle of it.

Anyways, I don’t have much to add, just a few things. 🙂

First, I was a little confused. You said I could make it as mysterious as I wanted it, and then listed a bunch of questions. Does that mean that I could make it so that people begin to ask those questions, or are you saying that I should answer those questions. Because, with answering those questions, it might seem like a little info dump-y and not as mysterious maybe. I was just a little confused my what you meant.

Also, one of those questions said, “How the world got this way.” What do you mean? Well, I guess, you could wonder how Frederick had to come to this underwater Capitol, but the rest of the world isn’t like that. Should I make that clear? You will find out in chapter one what the rest of the world is so…

Also, like I said above some of those questions you have will be answered later.

I also really like the things you said about Frederick. Haha… *Evil writer laugh* Just make sure you read chapter one next month, okay. So that you can see what rest of the world thinks about him. I mean, yeah, he’s a good guy in his own eyes, of  course, but what about to the rest of the world? What does the world think of his mission to unify them? What does the world think of the ways that he does it? I’m just saying, before you make yourself think he’s a good character you might want to see a second person’s view of him. *Walks away with eveil laughter echoing off the walls even though Inkdragon may not understand what was just said*

I think I’ve finally realized how complex my story actually is. *blink* *blink*

I’m so happy!!! And thank you again for all yourhelp full critiques. I will get to your soon. I’ve been busy this week. I read it, but it said view only then so I couldn’t make any suggestions or anything. Okay, I’m done. That was longer then I had planned it to be. Sorry. XD