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Julia replied to the topic Defenestration – My Most Recent Short Story in the forum Critiques 8 years, 1 month ago
@evelyn Sure 🙂
“The Healer stepped casually from the doorway. His finger tracing the newly painted frame off the window beside him. He looked up.” You could cut out the ‘he looked up’ part. Like, Simon isn’t even good enough for him to look up at while he’s talking to him because he’s so imperfect.
““Perfect?” Simon spat. “Killing – murdering is not perfect.”” You could take out the ‘killing’ part.












