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Valleys

November 26, 2020

I see a child stand

at the valley entrance.

Alone. Forlorn.

Blood on his feet.

Tears on his cheeks.

The shadows draw him in.

I can’t…

I can’t reach him;

Pull him back.

I can’t even speak.

 

I see a child walk

along the valley path.

Terrified. Trembling.

The ground is stones.

The air is smoke.

Scars trace his steps.

Please…

Please let me help;

I could save him.

I could take the pain.

 

I see a child fall

in the valley shadow.

Hurt. Deserted.

Covered in wounds.

Aching from lies.

He tries to stand.

He falls…

He falls again, again, and yet again.

God have mercy.

Isn’t there something I can do?

 

Look.

A whisper touches the air.

The wind turns to silver.

Beside the trembling child, a Figure stands.

His feet are bleeding.

My child,

this one is also mine.

 

Watch.

The voice is clearer.

The shadows surge.

Beside the stumbling child, a Figure walks.

His hands are scarred.

My dearest,

I’ve suffered it as well.

 

See.

The word echoes.

Dawn slips into the valley.

Beside the fallen child, a Figure kneels.

He is crying.

My love,

I know what I am doing.

 

Believe.

I stare at my hands.

They are bleeding,

torn on stone.

I’m kneeling, shadows on all sides.

You see their pain; I’ve felt it all.

The whisper is behind me.

To know is your valley.

 

To heal is mine.

20 Comments

  1. Dakota

    Love this!! Excellent job!!

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      Thanks!

  2. Libby

    Hope, this is so beautiful <3

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      *bows* thank you

    • Hope Ann

      I’m glad you enjoyed it.

  3. Abigail

    This is really good. I don’t often see such poetry. The final two lines are perfect.

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      Thanks! I love those lines too. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

  4. Isabelle

    Oh it’s stunning! Love this one! ❤

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      Thanks!

  5. Sarah

    Wow!!! Amazingly done!

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  6. Kristianne

    Wow! This is amazingly poignant and deep!!

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      Thanks!

  7. Ella F

    I wish I could express my feelings about this poem as much as you express feelings in Valleys. 😊

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      It is a poem I still feel very deeply. Most my poems don’t turn out quite this well though.

  8. Terah

    *sniffs* <3!!!!!!!!

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      *hands you a tissue*

  9. Kylie S. Pierce

    Wow… This is so amazingly beautiful. Thank you for writing this. It made my day!

    Reply
    • Hope Ann

      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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