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Brian Stansell started the topic The Importance of Being Human in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Back in July of 2017, I began writing the beginnings of a science fiction thriller, but kind of abandoned it partway through. It seemed reticent of the kind of scary space stories of the 1980s era movies when Alien and others were so popular in theaters.
I thought I might drop a little bit of it here to see what you guys think of it. Is it w…[Read more]
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Thank you for the tip! That would work a lot better than what i currently wrote. I know Jake is technically waking up in a strange scenario, but it would probably be better if he didn’t struggle and waited to see what would happen.
Again, thank you for the fighting tips! They are certainly one of my many weak spots…[Read more]
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Cathy replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
oh I know it lol!! Professional procrastinating and constant redrafting.
Uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh a lot…? (nix almost cried, I did cry, a lot…😭😭😭)
Lol, I figured out that my MC’s scar symbolizes choice, and I learned the story behind that aaaaaaaand the story behind why he compulsively tells the truth in every situation even though he’s very very…[Read more]
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Brian Stansell replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
So, if two guards have Jake between them, and at the beginning of the scene, Jake is unconscious, his body would be hanging slack between them, lower than their waistline. Any striking to be done would be below the guard’s waistline with Jake’s body angled down to a slant to the floor. A knee to the stomach would require one of the guards to rel…[Read more]
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Thank you for the tip! I was thinking something was off with that scene! If one of the guards hit Jake in the stomach with his knee, would that work?
I just love how Story Embers has writers and authors of various age groups!
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Brian Stansell replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
I noticed something here…
Think about the physical proximity of the two guards that would be on either side of him. Punching their captive in the mouth would make more sense if he was upright and facing them, or pinned to the wall. At best, a guard might give him a grazing blow down the side of his jaw, but that would b…[Read more]
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
(I’m gonna add this into part two) The reason the prisoners are working manually is because the dirt holds a flammable material that may ignite if they used heavy machinery.
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
(I remembered telling you about this so I wanted to tag you as well 😁)
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Here’s part two!
@this-is-not-an-alien @obrian-of-the-surface-world @Gracie-J, @lissie-w, @fitz, @jbstanhope @rose-colored-fancy
(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)
A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
@this-is-not-an-alien @obrian-of-the-surface-world @Gracie-J, @lissie-w, @fitz, @jbstanhope @rose-colored-fancy
Here’s part two!
(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)
A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]
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ScoutFinch190 replied to the topic Sci-fi short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Hi! sorry that part two’s been taking so long, I didn’t eralize how much i needed to change for the benefit of the storyline…🤦♀️ And… it’s not easy being a professional procrastinator.
Ooh, what tragic symbolism did you set up for?
Yeah, the over-analysis of symbolism in books i can understand, but it’s still…[Read more]
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Cathy replied to the topic SciFi Beta Trading in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Sweet!!! CONGRATS!!!!!!!!!
IT WAS AN AWESOME READ THANKS FOR THE OPPORTUNITY!!!!!!!!!!!
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Taylor Clogston replied to the topic SciFi Beta Trading in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
I published my book! Ebook available now, other formats available in future when I can get to them.
Thank you to @this-is-not-an-alien for beta reading!
This ended up as my final blurb:
Planet Dirt: Remnant of an exile world, ground down by governmental and megacorp warring.
The Accident a generation ago erased what its inhabitants had not…
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Lou Madeleine joined the group Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
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Winter Rose replied to the topic SW RP/Collaborative Story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
Aww, thank you! That means a lot 😊.
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Emma Walker replied to the topic SW RP/Collaborative Story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
Thank you! You’re so talented
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Emma Walker replied to the topic SW RP/Collaborative Story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
I love it!
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Winter Rose replied to the topic SW RP/Collaborative Story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 11 months ago
Thanks! I’m so glad you like it! 😄😄
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