July 29, 2020 at 1:55 pm #117077Livi Ryddle@anne_the_noob14
Okie dokie… Last thing Dharin did was walk over to the new doorway.
Oh, question for everyone: What do we think about kinda keeping everyone in groups of twos or threes in the castle, instead of everyone in a huge group? I feel like when we were all in the big group, there were some people who didn’t really know what to do or how to contribute to what was happening. But if we keep our characters split in smaller groups, that might offer more opportunity for everyone to kinda do something. Idk tho, just an idea!
Dharin paused before stepping through the door. He pulled his dagger from its sheath and handed it to Lytt behind him.
“Here. You have a bow, but this will be better for close-range. Quicker, too.” As an afterthought, he said, “And hand me the candlestick.”
If she ended up having to fight, he didn’t want her to catch her wings on fire trying to keep the candlestick from being in the way. Lytt took the dagger and gave him the candlestick, trying to peer over his shoulder at this new room.
It wasn’t a room, exactly. There were five winding stairwells leading down from the small landing they stood on. From one, a horrible stench arose. Dharin shook his head at it. The second smelled like dust and mildew. The third was where the draft of air came from. The fourth wound down clockwise; very bad for a left-handed swordsman. And the fifth… Odd noises, reminiscent of rats scuttling on stone, came from it. Dharin looked down at Lytt.
~Sir Nicholas BeauvalletJuly 29, 2020 at 9:11 pm #117108July 29, 2020 at 9:40 pm #117112Joelle Stone@joelle-stone
Sorry for not being here! I was really busy today. 🙂
That’s great! I can post it on the other forum. 🙂
As for you previous question, yes, that’s what I’m trying to decide with Lytt. I kinda want her to get into a romantic relationship in my book, and I’m testing her to see if that’ll work out. So yeah, thanks for going along with that!! I realize the subject can get a little awkward, and I appreciate your willingness to help. 🙂
Hm. I was actually just thinking about that. I mean, if Lytt never finds out that Dharin likes her, it’s gonna be difficult to answer my question ’bout her. I don’t think she’d go along with being kissed or anything like that, so maybe verbal would be best? Or something along those lines. I’m trying to decide if I want her to like him or not. Are you ok if I act (in my brain) like I want her to act with the character I’m thinking about having her in a relationship with? So she’ll act towards Dharin like I’ll have her act towards the other guy. Does that work?
"A writer's life consists of either writing their book or thinking about writing their book." ~?July 29, 2020 at 9:51 pm #117113
Can you describe Isaac at this point in time a bit more… (I don’t mean write another segment with that in there, I mean, you can if you want to…)
Sorry, I’m just not exactly sure I understand completely, and would like to get it right. (: All I get is that he looks more menacing, enough to scare a pack of wolves… Should that be enough? (Am I making to much of this?/Should probably have just gone with it?)
Sorry again, and a preemptive thank you.
I assumed ‘fenrir’ was supposed to be figurative. Was it by any chance literal? (I doubt it, just want to make sure.)
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Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 30, 2020 at 6:29 am #117127
When Isaac is The Fenrir, he becomes a true assassin. Like the Uruk hai from the Lord of the Rings, he no no longer feels pain or fear. A berserker. Which is why he hates his old self. It is most assuredly effective in the fights he gets into but he losses most all control over himself. At the stage of the book I took him from, he has returned to God and is trying to fulfill his mission without causing too much pain on the innocent.
By the way, Fenrir is a giant wolf in Nordic legend. In Ragnarok it is said that it will kill Odin. His codename is a form of poetic foreshadowing. It was that or Garm, the hound guarding the gates of the underworld.
The Devil saw me with my head down and got excited. Then I said AmenJuly 30, 2020 at 10:43 am #117137
By the way, Fenrir is a giant wolf in Nordic legend.
I looked up the word ‘fenrir’ last night, and saw that. Very cool how you use it.
Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 30, 2020 at 11:28 am #117149
Don’t shoot him? What did he mean ‘don’t shoot him’?! Teagen’s already strained mind went berserk inside him.
Then Teagen saw why. Franz suddenly stepped out, walking toward the hounds. What?! Teagen trembled, but fired again, hitting another wolf. Kay, don’t hit you while in the midst of the target. Great. Do you not see how dumb I am with this thing?!
Teagen’s nose twitched, then something happened. Teagen’s lips parted slightly, and his forehead wrinkled, What the
The wolves were cowering before Franz. The gunman fired his pistol and one dropped.
A terrible aura was around him, floating. Deadly. Not that Franz hadn’t been before…
Teagen swallowed hard as Franz fired again. Another dog down. More cowering. The man/thing with the flaming sword took a step back too. Stunned. Then the light vanished.
Oh boy, Teagen took a step forward, lifted his gun, finger hovering over the trigger. But he stopped. Don’t fire you louse. It’ll just bring all the dogs back to you. You’re easy meat. Not like him.
It would be heroic? Or dumb. Maybe both.
Tis strange how a million thoughts can go through one’s head in a manner of seconds. Which is what happened here.
A few wolves retreated back down there hole and vanished, but ten still remained. They circled Franz, heads lowered, shoulders spiked, teeth barred like a million daggers. He was gonna die, But Franz didn’t act like it.
His posture exuded power. Control. As if he were the master. As if he the /victim/, was the perpetrator?
Teagen re-aimed his gun. Once again moving his finger to the trigger. He wasn’t the best aim, but the mutts weren’t that close to Franz, were they?
Franz struck again, and a wolf died. The two next to it backing up like wounded puppies. But the ones behind him suddenly got bold.
With a curse Teagen fired his piece. A dog dropped with a loud whine. Then eyes turned to him. Both dog and man. He cursed again. Retreat! More filth came from his lips, Yeah right,
Dogs moved. Franz shot dead two more. Teagen got another. Suddenly the blazing sword reappeared and the cloaked man cut down more dogs.
I also am (at some point) going to have Teagen think something like, Did Franz mean not to shoot him on purpose? Or something along that line. Maybe when Isaac turns back to face him and still is trying to push down his Femrir side? However far away that is…
Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 30, 2020 at 1:26 pm #117155Livi Ryddle@anne_the_noob14
It’s fine! I’ve been busy as well, as I’m at my grandparents’ right now 🙂
Ok cool. And it’s no problem! I actually really enjoy reading and writing stories with a bit of romance, so I’m totally cool with it.
And yes! That’s fine. Just have her act/do whatever and Dharin will just kinda flow with it 🙂
~Sir Nicholas BeauvalletJuly 30, 2020 at 6:10 pm #117181
Hah! Well, thanks a lot @christlover . But, I guess Teagen deserves it…
Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 30, 2020 at 6:55 pm #117184
I wouldn’t worry. I fixed things up so that it shouldn’t be a problem.
The Devil saw me with my head down and got excited. Then I said AmenJuly 30, 2020 at 10:35 pm #117215
@christlover I just posted on the ‘Chronicle’. I assume Vrahe will want to make his own introduction. (:
Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 31, 2020 at 9:23 pm #117341Dashuri Halad@christlover
Sorry if I got your characters wrong, I’m not really sure how they would act in situations like this. I’m also sorry for how bad the writing is. I didn’t have much time to write and wasn’t sure about how to introduce Vrahe. I also look forward to seeing Isaac’s reaction to Vrahe’s alias. It is quite the coincidence that I chose to name Vrahe’s greatest rival Ermordung. I won’t be around for the next couple of days, but I look forward to seeing what has happened when I get back.
"When injustice becomes law, rebellion becomes duty."
-VJuly 31, 2020 at 9:43 pm #117343
You’re good. Teagen did seem a bit too bold in his speech, but I can go with it. (I mean, he just had his second life or death situation) almost anything wouldn’t be that much of a stretch.
Oh, and if Teagen could speak he would thank you for the compliment (though uncomfortable with the thanks, and likely whispering. ‘Courage’ wow. It’s the best compliment he’s ever gotten.
You will be missed! And if you’re leaving for a good thing, Have fun!
Passion means to be willing to suffer.July 31, 2020 at 10:15 pm #117345
I just posted on the ‘Chronicle’. (:
Passion means to be willing to suffer.August 1, 2020 at 11:35 pm #117385
Questions for @christlover upon his return.
1. What color is Vrahe’s hair at the moment? I assume black (since he’s not on a job) but would like to make sure.
2. Does he say philosophical things? Like ‘Everyone is a murderer in their own way.’? Because, uh, he sort of did…
3. You said he was a good leader…What about a team player?
4. How good are his acting skills, as far as pretending he’s worthy of trust?
5. Food. Would he eat dog?
And there might be more in the future…
Passion means to be willing to suffer.
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