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  • #113691
    Tal
    @tal

    @rusted-knight @anne_the_noob14

    “I’m lost. Could you tell me the way out?” said the voice from behind. He was about to answer, but he swiftly realized there were more people behind him. A boy, about his age, was answering who had apparently asked the question. Someone else stood nearby. One wore strange clothing, but the others were covered in more familiar garb.

    Where in Jolara could I be? This must be a dream, or maybe a vision. Or it might be one of Josiah’s pranks. That’s equally likely.

    Luke carefully held out his sword. He was in no hurry to use it, but was prepared to meet enemies of the King. He coughed quietly, and all attention came to him. The man who had spoken seemed to be analyzing him, sizing up his ability. The front most one showed uncertainty. Then, he bowed at Luke’s feet.

    “My deepest apologies if our conversing has awoken you, your… Highness…?”

    “Oh, no, you didn’t wake me up. And please —please, stand. Save your bows for the One True King.” The man gave Luke an odd expression and stood. “My name is Luke, anyways. Prince Luke.” He stopped and stared at the ground for a moment, then looked back up. “Do…do any of you know where we are? Back there—” Luke pointed vaguely in the direction he came from with his sword, “—is something that looks exactly like my room back home, but this is, obviously, not my home.”

    • This reply was modified 1 year, 4 months ago by Tal.

    "My sword you shall have, but never in surrender!"
    Profile art by DeepRun

    #113695
    Livi Ryddle
    @anne_the_noob14

    @everyone

    Here’s a slightly different version of my earlier bit, since Dharin doesn’t totally understand the French spoken by Isaac:

    (Italiacs meaning he’s either thinking or speaking in a language besides English [that they call the Common tongue])

    ____

    Dharin glanced down at Jaylin as the boy asked, “Hey, you want to explore what’s behind some of these doors?”

    He smiled, and was about to reply when a man stepped out of the shadows, and said something in an odd tongue. It was posed as a question, and it sounded similar enough to Ikarialn that Dharin was fairly sure the man asked how to get somewhere.

    Dharin felt Jaylin look up at him before saying, “Um, well, we just got here also…” but all Dharin could think was,

    Why in the world does no one know where they are? Perhaps this is an experiment that some of the wizards are doing. Maybe they created this place and brought people from all over to study our interactions. That would be the most logical answer to this mess. 

    Dharin studied the man. He looked like he wished he was anywhere else at the moment, and his accent and clothing were unlike any that Dharin had ever heard or seen. The man seemed to be studying him as well, and Dharin made a quick decision, offering the man a small smile and a nod, and said in his best Ikarialn,

    The lad is correct, my sir. We’re just as lost as you.” He made no mention of the two women they left further down the hall they came from. Something told him the man offered no threat to the women, but Dharin had found that it always paid to be cautious. Something in the man’s eyes changed, but Dharin couldn’t tell what. If he had to guess, though, the man probably just made a mental note to be wary of them. A reasonable thing to do.

    From behind them came a small cough. Dharin turned and saw a lad of about 13, with sleep-tousled hair, holding a sword uncertainly in front of him. He didn’t hold it as if he wasn’t sure of the weapon; that wasn’t it. He held it as if he wasn’t sure if he would need it or not. He wore royal robes, and Dharin’s mind went to King Vladimir. As far as he knew, the king’s son was a bit older, 17 perhaps, and he didn’t know any wizard who would use the crown prince as a test subject, but still… Dharin gracefully knelt and inclined his head towards the lad, saying,

    “My deepest apologies if our conversing has awoken you, your… Highness…?” he trailed off, looking up at the lad, and waited for his form of address to be corrected or accepted, as he heard the other man and Jaylin speaking again.

    ____


    @tal
    Ok cool! 😀

    “Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"

    #113696
    Livi Ryddle
    @anne_the_noob14

    @tal

    Well snap XD I did the same thing as @rusted-knight did lol. I didn’t see the latest post. Let’s see…

    _____

    The lad shook his head. “Oh, no, you didn’t wake me up. And please —please, stand. Save your bows for the One True King.” Dharin stood, a bit confused, as the boy went on: “My name is Luke, anyways. Prince Luke.” He stopped, looking at his feet for a minute, as if gathering his thoughts. “Do…do any of you know where we are? Back there—” Here, he waved his sword behind him, “—is something that looks exactly like my room back home, but this is, obviously, not my home.”

    Dharin nodded to himself. Yes, this was definitely some sort of experiment that some of the wizards were doing. And this wasn’t King Vladimir’s son. Must be the prince of a kingdom across the Tridi [A.N. That’s one of their oceans].

    “I’m afraid we are all lost and confused as well, your Highness. I think this must be an experiment set up by some of the wizards, bringing people in from all over the earth to study our interactions. That is the only reasonable explanation I can think of.”

    _____

    “Enough! Be quiet! I can’t hear myself think! I can’t hear my teeth chatter!"

    #113698
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    Awesome! I will write later! @kimlikesart You should join us over here!

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113715
    Tal
    @tal

    @anne_the_noob14 Maybe I should post an announcement before I add another part XD (also, unrelated, Luke refers to himself as a prince in respect to the King (God), but he’s by right a king. Just clearing that up if it was confusing)

    The man stared into the distance, and it seemed to Luke he was talking something over with himself. He nodded slightly as he said, “I’m afraid we are all lost and confused as well, your Highness. I think this must be an experiment set up by some of the wizards, bringing people in from all over the earth to study our interactions. That is the only reasonable explanation I can think of.”

    Luke thought for a moment. Wizards? What are those? But he just nodded. “Well, perhaps we should look for a way out. There has to be an end to the hall, or maybe one of the doors leads out. Or, we might be able to break one of the windows and climb out.”

    "My sword you shall have, but never in surrender!"
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    #113721
    Rusted Knight
    @rusted-knight

    Isaac could only remember the cat he had seen land on its back. Wizards? Experiment? Had he inhaled some form of  hallucinogen without realizing it? Or was this a play by the Gestapo or SS to lower his guard. He would continue to play the Frenchman for now and not reveal too much about himself. If the swordsman was right, the rift was more than a slight problem.

    Isaac had to return otherwise Operation Valkyrie would fail again. That would be his last chance. After that assassination attempt, Hitler would be too well guarded and there would be no one outside his inner circle to fill the power vacuum. There would be no way to force Germany out of the war. He had to return or everything he had done would have been for nothing.

    “Well, perhaps we should look for a way out. There has to be an end to the hall, or maybe one of the doors leads out. Or, we might be able to break one of the windows and climb out.” said the prince.

    Information was important. Anything might help.

    “There is a library back here. We may find a map of this place.” said Isaac.

    The Devil saw me with my head down and got excited. Then I said Amen

    #113732
    Tal
    @tal

    “There is a library back here. We may find a map of this place,” replied the man in the back. Luke nodded agreement.

    We might also be able to find some books about this place.

    Now excited with the possibility of finding books from and about this strange new land, Luke said, “Lead the way.”

    "My sword you shall have, but never in surrender!"
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    #113741
    Ariella Newheart
    @ariella-newheart

    @anne_the_noob14 Oh goodness, you guys really had fun here. xD I’m so sorry for disappearing off the face of the map. I was working on finishing up school, but that isn’t really a good excuse for not checking in every now and then.

    Would you mind giving me a little summary of what has happened so far and who is currently involved? If you don’t have time, I can read through the previous posts, but it would take me a while. I’m just going to assume that Marlowe has been lurking and listening in the background the whole time. 🙂

    Writer, illustrator, Parimi Alcan

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    #113744
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @ariella-newheart

    Haha hey! Yeah, I’m a bit discombobulated as well haha! So Marlowe was talking to Claire’s character Emory right?? So the boys left them behind in the hall, and then Claire dropped out so…! You maybe can just bring Marlowe back in and she runs into the guys. Conner and the other girl…oh yeah, Charlotte are not really doing anything so far bc Cristlover never responded to Kristiana Hasseman lol! So yeah, right now it’s my character, Jaylin, Tal’s character Luke, Rusted Knights character, Isaac, and Livi’s character Dharin. I think that all. I just got through with reading everyone’s replies and it looks like we’re gonna go find a library or something haha! Anyway, I hope that helped! XD

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113745
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @anne_the_noob14 @tal @rusted-knight

    Okay holy smokes, I really need to start replying bc I’m kinda lost so…any way I’m gonna write a reply right now lol!

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113746
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    Does everyone know everyone’s names! 😉

    (character wise lol)

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113749
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    How old is Isaac??????? @rusted-knight

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113750
    Tal
    @tal

    @beth Luke doesn’t know anyone’s names, but Dharin, Jaylin, and Isaac know Luke’s name.

    "My sword you shall have, but never in surrender!"
    Profile art by DeepRun

    #113751
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    Alrighty here is my response or Jaylin’s rather lol! I hope you don’t mind @rusted-knight I made Isaac start walking towards the library lol! Anyway here it is hopefully I did everyone okay and all that good stuff haha!

     

    Jaylin watched as the other guys talked of a way out.

    “There is a library back here. We may find a map of this place.” Isaac said.

    “Lead the way,” Luke said. Jaylin could tell his excitement was rising.

    Dharin’s words still rang in his head. “I think this must be an experiment set up by some of the wizards, bringing people in from all over the earth to study our interactions.”

    If that were true they were in trouble.

    He cleared his throat. “If what Dharin said was true, then we need to start thinking of this as serious. At least where I come from, the wizards, or the Graylick as they are called in Brarlock, are bad news.”

    Dharin and Luke looked at him while Isaac started walking off down one of the halls. “This way!” he called over his shoulder.

    “Come on we’ll talk as we walk.” He smiled and started after Isaac.

     

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

    #113752
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @tal

    Aww I see! Thanks.

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

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