WIP In Need of Critiques: The Clefs

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    Banana Peacock Warrior

      Hi, Story Embers people! So, I love critiques and I currently have a WIP that is in the editing stage if there’s anyone out there who loves critiquing! This is a Google Docs thingy and I’ll add more as I edit along. I hope you like it, so far!

      The Clefs

      “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
      ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭


      Veraza Winterknight


      *really really wants to*

      *but is already alphaing too many things*

      *and is really bad at critiquing*

      Um. Maybe on another draft or something? Or just when it gets published 😉

      (ENFP) Even the word hopeless is not entirely devoid of hope.


      Banana Peacock Warrior

        @kari-karast: s’all good. 😉

        And BTW, if anyone else is interested, I’m going to put down the premise/plot here so that you don’t have to really open it up and skim the whole thing or anything to figure it out beforehand.

        Also, The Clefs is a fantasy.

        THE CLEFS:
         Cadenza is the greatest dancer on Harmony Island, the most beautiful of all the keymatines, and her unique sound gives her the prominent name of Middle C. Having risen to the very top of society in both the Treble and Bass tribes, she basks in constant praise from her fellow dancers and can only imagine what it will be like once she comes of age and will be considered old enough to dance with the adults. However, when a feud arises between the tribes on her behalf, Cadenza’s fame is put in sudden jeopardy and she wonders if she can ever bring things back to the way they were… before her reputation is ruined in the process.

        “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
        ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

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