July 25, 2018 at 4:44 pm #42185
I had the honor today to judge our recent guild war where the goal was to write a short story from the perspective of a five-year-old, focusing on character voice.
Everybody had something that made their five-year-old engaging, but I have to say one submission stood out.
First of all, in this submission, the character voice felt very believable. It wasn’t too simplistic or innocent, and it also wasn’t too mature, intellectual, or astute. I saw a picture of a big mind with little data to work with — definitely simple, but not basic.
From a broader perspective, I also really appreciated the descriptions. They were very specific, but fluid and left me with a strong emotional impression.
You’re probably wondering who the winner is. In my traditional style, I’m going to make you wait.
The winner is, Avensbeck!
Wow, those guys have won a lot of our guild wars. Now, don’t lose heart other guilds. You can definitely compete, you just need to step your game up a tad to get that extra little umph that will place you above the Avensers.
If you want to analyze the submissions from each guild, the link is below. Avensbeck is #2.
👖 🐢🐢🐢🐢🐢July 25, 2018 at 5:09 pm #42186Gabrielle Pollack@gabriellepollack
You guys just keep blowing me away. 😀 Congrats <span style=”background-color: #f6d5d9;”>on </span>your win, Avensers!
@toklaham-veruzia @overcomer @martina @epicaddie2 @supermonkey42 @gabrielle @snapper @jenwriter17 @naomijackson @dekreel @bonnie @melissa-g @kiraelizabeth @aislinn-mollisong @dragongeek @haviloki @sleepwalkingmk @sam-kowal @law0413 @claire @christianna-hellwig @zanzibee @libby @natalie-marieJuly 25, 2018 at 5:18 pm #42189Christianna Hellwig@christianna-hellwig
"...Together fused in such a way,
That what I speak of is a single light."July 25, 2018 at 6:03 pm #42197July 25, 2018 at 6:15 pm #42201ESJohnson@esjohnson
Aww, too bad! Congrats, Avensbeck!
Don't blame me if I spill the ink of my mind on your carpet. I just figured it needed a makeover.July 25, 2018 at 7:00 pm #42205Kate Flournoy@kate
Whoo-hoo! Go Avensbeck! *confetti and glitter* ‘Tis an honor to compete with you. 😉
INFP-A. If you can't be brilliant, odd will do.July 25, 2018 at 7:04 pm #42206Jane Maree@jane-maree
@inspirewrite @valtmy @esther-sears @parker @caleb-e-king @h-jones @selah-chelyah @writerpiper @jessi-rae @theswordinthebook @thewirelessblade @fctait @faith_blum @professorsjb @spottedlivvie @katthewriter @lightning-spider @skye @_simplybee @mairin-atha @a_small_mousepad
Amazing job to the Avengers! *resounding applause* You did great. 😀
Writing Heroes ♦ Writing Hope // janemareeauthor.com.auJuly 26, 2018 at 12:14 am #42236Jenna Terese@jenwriter17
@gabriellepollack Three cheers for Avensbeck! (and our awesome guildmaster 😉 ) <3
"If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
www.jennaterese.comJuly 26, 2018 at 12:58 am #42242Julianne@julianne
Congratulations, Avensbeck!! I loved all these submissions. Everyone did so well 🙂
INTP-T & 4w5. Overthinker, musician, and food addict.July 26, 2018 at 12:19 pm #42256K.M. Small@morreafirebird
@bekks2017 @sarah-inkdragon @theinvizibleman @lydia-writes @warrenluther04 @ajaj2000 @sageinthemeadow @cowlick @enu @kara-lynn @sarah-narnathron @thetessinator @cinderella_28_ @jose-cuellar-ramirez @the-inkspiller @karthmin @allison-grace @devastate-lasting
Congrats, Avensers! 😀 😀 😀
We Ereki will beat you next time 😉
"Beauty will save the world." - DostoevskyJuly 26, 2018 at 12:41 pm #42261Linyang Zhang@devastate-lasting
Congrats, guys. *slow clap*
"Moving on and on and on we go,
Shining lights above blown away..."July 26, 2018 at 4:42 pm #42283Steward of the Pen@steward-of-the-pen
Congratulations again, Avensbeck! *showers you with pine needle confetti* Don’t worry though, we’ll beat you yet!
@daeus-lamb What do you think of including a runner up in the future?July 26, 2018 at 5:40 pm #42288July 26, 2018 at 8:11 pm #42299Sarah Narnathron@sarah-narnathron
Congrats, Avensbeck! Y’all deserved the win; your story was excellent.
Welcome to the masquerade.July 27, 2018 at 1:24 pm #42333Samuel@samuel
Wait one second, they killed someone to gain an unusual amount of emotion. There’s got to be something in the rulebook about that…
Congratulations, Avensbeck! I loved your story.
No one reads these anyway
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