July 3, 2018 at 5:23 pm #40511
If you think this sounds weird or anything, please tell me, and I’ll change it. But here I go, a poem which I called The Crimson Dove.
When took off into the air a dove,
There were many bullets slicing through the air above.
But little did the hunters know
That she was no ordinary dove.
With her swift crimson feathers, she could do nothing but go
Through the bitter, bullet-filled air unloved.
But when landing on the ground thereof
She discovered something that she was very proud of.
Upon the moist ground lay a golden egg
With a beautiful rainbow-colored diamond shoved
Into the center of the egg
of her new dove.
Then with a little cackle, cracked open the egg to a brand-new dove.
The next and only Crimson Dove of the world thereof
Besides her, of course.
But little time did the mother dove have left, before vanishing to Almedrov
Where all the long-gone doves rested in peace out of
The wicked word of unloved doves and the Great Hunting Force.
Then said the mother to her young dove,
“Don’t forget to be a symbol of love.”
For the bitter world was filled with hate.
Hate so great, that it sometimes needed a tinge of love
To steady the world from the hate it would create.
For the Crimson Dove was to come and live thereof.
"Muhahaha!"- Unknown VillainJuly 3, 2018 at 5:28 pm #40512
Oops, *just realizes* I meant to have a bigger space between ‘the wicked world of unloved doves and the Great Hunting Force’ and ‘then said the mother to her young dove’ like all the rest of them.
"Muhahaha!"- Unknown VillainJuly 3, 2018 at 9:38 pm #40538July 4, 2018 at 8:32 am #40554The Fledgling Artist@the-fledgling-artist
@andrew Good job. 🙂 Poetry is such a beautiful art.
"Though I'm not yet who I will be, I'm no longer who I was."July 4, 2018 at 10:05 am #40565
@andrew Good job!
Have you ever heard of meter in a poem? I recognized some at points but I was wondering if you know of that trope of writing.July 4, 2018 at 10:45 am #40573July 4, 2018 at 11:05 am #40584Jenna Terese@jenwriter17
@andrew I like it! 😀 I don’t know much about poetry, so I don’t really know enough to give suggestions 😉
"If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
www.jennaterese.comJuly 4, 2018 at 11:05 am #40585Brink@nuetrobolt
@andrew, nice poem!
@evelyn, I write poetry some times, and I took The Grammar of Poetry, and I had to learn all about meter, but it made it so confusing, so I usually actually skip meter. Bad, I know. But poetry still sounds good without it. I couldn’t tell if Andrew had it or not.
Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. PetersonJuly 4, 2018 at 11:19 am #40589
@nuetrobolt Meter isn’t needed in a poem, it’s just one way to write it. 🙂
@andrew I’m going to try to quickly explain meter the best I can:
In English words we have syllables: “Nap-kin” – that’s two syllables there. Notice though that when you say it you stress the first syllable. “NAP-kin,” – like that. Well to use meter in poetry, you take advantage of that and create a beat in your writing. For example here is the first line of one of my poems:
“I met among the golden stars a man who said he traveled far.”
When you read that pattern created from stressed syllables is: “DA da DA da DA da” etc.
“i MET a-MONG the GOLD-en STARS a MAN who SAID he TRAVEL-ed FAR”
That is the basic meter pattern (DA-da-DA-da-DA-da) but there are others.
Does that make sense? Do you have any questions?
The nice thing about having meter is that it flows well and sounds smoother.July 4, 2018 at 1:17 pm #40604
Thank ya’ll you liked my poem!
*Suddenly irritated just recently because the power went off*
@jenwriter17, that’s okay. Don’t worry about it. *sends a little emoji* 🙂
@nuetrobolt, so, what poem have you been up to recently? I’m still wondering if I should like get all these types of made-up animals, then write a poem about them and also giving them a purpose.
@evelyn, I think I may be getting what you’re trying to say. Like making a pattern of two-syllable words that sounds cool, going with some sort of rhythm?
"Muhahaha!"- Unknown VillainJuly 4, 2018 at 1:26 pm #40606
@andrew Yes, sort of, except it doesn’t have to be two syllable words. If you look at my example you can see that I use one-syllable words too. 🙂July 4, 2018 at 1:30 pm #40608July 4, 2018 at 1:38 pm #40609July 4, 2018 at 8:14 pm #40632Brink@nuetrobolt
@andrew, I havn’t made any poems lately.
Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. PetersonJuly 5, 2018 at 10:36 am #40665
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