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  • #40511
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    If you think this sounds weird or anything, please tell me, and I’ll change it. But here I go, a poem which I called The Crimson Dove.

    When took off into the air a dove,

    There were many bullets slicing through the air above.

    But little did the hunters know

    That she was no ordinary dove.

    With her swift crimson feathers, she could do nothing but go

    Through the bitter, bullet-filled air unloved.

     

    But when landing on the ground thereof

    She discovered something that she was very proud of.

    Upon the moist ground lay a golden egg

    With a beautiful rainbow-colored diamond shoved

    Into the center of the egg

    of her new dove.

     

    Then with a little cackle, cracked open the egg to a brand-new dove.

    The next and only Crimson Dove of the world thereof

    Besides her, of course.

    But little time did the mother dove have left, before vanishing to Almedrov

    Where all the long-gone doves rested in peace out of

    The wicked word of unloved doves and the Great Hunting Force.

    Then said the mother to her young dove,

    “Don’t forget to be a symbol of love.”

    For the bitter world was filled with hate.

    Hate so great, that it sometimes needed a tinge of love

    To steady the world from the hate it would create.

    For the Crimson Dove was to come and live thereof.

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40512
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    Oops,Β *just realizes*Β I meant to have a bigger space between ‘the wicked world of unloved doves and the Great Hunting Force’ and ‘then said the mother to her young dove’ like all the rest of them.

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40538
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    Tagging some people: @jenwriter17, @the-fledgling-artist, @evelyn, @nuetrobolt. Anybody else. What do you think about this poetry?

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40554
    The Fledgling Artist
    @the-fledgling-artist

    @andrew Good job. πŸ™‚ Poetry is such a beautiful art.

    "Though I'm not yet who I will be, I'm no longer who I was."

    #40565
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @andrew Good job!

    Have you ever heard of meter in a poem? I recognized some at points but I was wondering if you know of that trope of writing.

    #40573
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    @the-fledgling-artist, thank you! Its fun to just think about something random, then make a poem about it.


    @evelyn
    , thank you, too!

    I haven’t heard of meter in a poem before. What exactly is it? If its something I should have already known… well, I don’t know!

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40584
    Jenna Terese
    @jenwriter17

    @andrew I like it! πŸ˜€ I don’t know much about poetry, so I don’t really know enough to give suggestions πŸ˜‰

    "If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
    www.jennaterese.com

    #40585
    Brink
    @nuetrobolt

    @andrew, nice poem!


    @evelyn
    , I write poetry some times, and I took The Grammar of Poetry, and I had to learn all about meter, but it made it so confusing, so I usually actually skip meter. Bad, I know. But poetry still sounds good without it. I couldn’t tell if Andrew had it or not.

    Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. Peterson

    #40589
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @nuetrobolt Meter isn’t needed in a poem, it’s just one way to write it. πŸ™‚


    @andrew
    I’m going to try to quickly explain meter the best I can:

    In English words we have syllables: “Nap-kin” – that’s two syllables there.Β  Notice though that when you say it you stress the first syllable. “NAP-kin,” – like that. Well to use meter in poetry, you take advantage of that and create a beat in your writing. For example here is the first line of one of my poems:

    “I met among the golden stars a man who said he traveled far.”

    When you read that pattern created from stressed syllables is:Β  “DA da DA da DA da” etc.

    “i MET a-MONG the GOLD-en STARS a MAN who SAID he TRAVEL-ed FAR”

    That is the basic meter pattern (DA-da-DA-da-DA-da) but there are others.

    Does that make sense? Do you have any questions?

    The nice thing about having meter is that it flows well and sounds smoother.

     

    • This reply was modified 3 years, 1 month ago by Evelyn.
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    #40604
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    Thank ya’ll you liked my poem!

    *Suddenly irritated just recently because the power went off*


    @jenwriter17
    , that’s okay. Don’t worry about it. *sends a little emoji* πŸ™‚


    @nuetrobolt
    , so, what poem have you been up to recently? I’m still wondering if I should like get all these types of made-up animals, then write a poem about them and also giving them a purpose.


    @evelyn
    , I think I may be getting what you’re trying to say. Like making aΒ pattern of two-syllable words that sounds cool, going with some sort of rhythm?

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40606
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @andrew Yes, sort of, except it doesn’t have to be two syllable words. If you look at my example you can see that I use one-syllable words too. πŸ™‚

    #40608
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    @evelyn, okay. *understands now*

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #40609
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @andrew Okay. πŸ™‚

    #40632
    Brink
    @nuetrobolt

    @andrew, I havn’t made any poems lately.

    Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. Peterson

    #40665
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    @nuetrobolt, that’s okay. πŸ™‚

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

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