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Oops, I didn’t see your last post! 😅
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
I should have just waited for you to send me the picture; that would have been a lot easier. XD I spent at least 20 minutes looking for it. But I did enjoy looking at all the other artwork in that thread.
That is crazy, because MY sister is an ENFP as well! She and Hydra are a lot alike, actually. And I pinky promise you it was not intentional. At all.
No way!! I learned ASL from Lifeprint too!!!!!! Ahhhhh!!! *virtual hug* The last year I took an outside class, too, but the majority was from Lifeprint. Isn’t Bill Vicars simply hilarious?
I like the background for Kedori. I wouldn’t call it an issue at all! The fact that there really isn’t a Deaf community actually sounds more accurate. Lots of Deaf people, even today, have signs that they or their family made up because they didn’t have any sort of Deaf community. One of my outside class teachers, who is deaf, had a sign growing up that meant “skunk” based off of Pepe Lepew (prob didn’t spell that right) from Looney Toons and the way that he jumped. But that is completely off topic. XD
Yes, sign language is hard, because it is a visual language. Works for movies. You don’t get that in a book. On top of that the grammar is so different. I started a story where one of my MCs was mute and used sign language, but I didn’t get the part where everyone around her could actually understand before I dropped the story. I do hope to get back to it at some point. It seems like a fun challenge–writing ASL into a story.
And thank you for your encouragement concerning my story! They certainly are a interesting group. Honestly, I’m struggling a bit trying to fit everything I want to say while still keeping up the pace of the story. I’m working on it. And hey! That’s what rewrites are for, right? But if you are really interested in beta reading, I need some input on this latest chapter I’ve been working on. I introduce a crucial side character, and I’m not sure if my representation of him is accurate. I’m not quite done writing this section yet, but when I am, would you be willing to look it over and give me your opinion?
By the way, just in case I haven’t mentioned it enough already, I think your story concept rocks! I haven’t even read all of it and already I am in love with the story and characters. Keep on dreaming; keep on writing!
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan I know, I loved looking at all the art on the exchange page! Everyone’s art is so good; I just spent a while figuring out which people’s style best fit my boi before making my request 😛 .
AHHH! I was wondering if you MIGHT have learned some from Lifeprint, just because you automatically used the d/Deaf differences, but of course technically you could have learned that anywhere. 😛
Agh, I love Dr. Vicars! I’ll often just laugh in the middle of an ASL lesson and say, “Mom, guess what he did now?”
Hee hee, I’d love to read it! Do you want to post it directly on here, or do you want to create a Google doc or something? Also, when you have it ready, could you specify what level of critiquing you’re looking for? Because I can be pretty detailed when I’m asked to be (including with my own stuff; I’ll have my sister reading my stories and think, man, I need to fix that or add that, etc. XD), but I also don’t want to overwhelm people when they’re just looking for general opinions! 😅
Aww, thanks! You’re so sweet! 😊
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
You know, I think I may put a request out there too, just because I’m really interested now.
YAAAASSSS I would totally do that! I would be sitting at the computer and randomly NEED to tell somebody what Dr. Vicars did that was so funny, but it’s so hard to explain so I never get the idea across quite right. (also I’m terrible at explaining funny events??)
Oh really?? *starry eyes* That makes me so happy! I would probably do a Google doc (if I can figure out how) because I like how the comments within the doc work. And THANK YOU SO MUCH because you are literally the first person EVER who has even offered to give detailed feedback!! I am literally the same way as you are. I will give incredibly detailed feedback, and I am so worried that I’m going to hurt someone’s feelings, when I’m really just trying to make their story even better. I wish I could get the same level of feedback that I give to other people. So please; be as detailed as you like! I’ll probably post the link here when I’m ready. Fingers crossed within the next week.
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan Yay! That sounds awesome! 😀 I’ll warn you of two things, though: one, this MIGHT be the first time I’ve done full-on detailed beta critiques, so there’s no telling how this will go. I’ll do my best, though! 😀 Two, since I’ve only got a week to finish a lot of school before Christmas break, it might be a little while before I can sit down and do a good job. I’m excited to read it, though, and will do it as soon as I can!
Haha, I know! I kind of look at editing and critiquing the way I look at getting shots. Does it hurt? Of course it does; it’s my baby, and it’s painful to see what’s wrong with it. But is it for the best in the long run? Yes, and because of that I want the most detailed help I can get so I don’t send my darling into the world in a less-than-optimal form. I found a list of questions (or maybe my sister did; she’s always sending me helpful writers’ stuff she finds!) on Pinterest that helps you get constructive feedback from beta readers without making them uncomfortable by having to say something negative about your story. I’ll put them here in case it helps you out:
I. At what point did you feel like “Ah, now the story has really begun!”
2. What were the points where you found yourself skimming?
3. Which setting in the book was clearest to you as you were reading it? Which
do you remember the best?
4. Which character would you most like to meet and get to know?
5. What was the most suspenseful moment in the book?
6. If you had to pick one character to get rid of, who would you axe?
7. Was there a situation in the novel that reminded you of something in your
own life?
8. Where did you stop reading, the first time you cracked open the manuscript?
(Can show you where your first dull part is, and help you fix your pacing.)
9. What was the last book you read, before this? And what did you think of it?
(This can put their comments in context in surprising ways, when you find
out what their general interests are. It might surprise you.)
10. Finish this sentence: “l kept reading because…”Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
I love the analogy you use for critique! That is a really good way of putting it.
And thank you so much for that list! I like it a lot! I would only be giving you this one chapter, but I can definitely see myself using that once I’m having people beta read the entire manuscript.
Also, I’m up for another word war anytime. 😉 If you know other people who may be interested in warring, please tag them because I don’t really know anybody.
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan I’d love to do another! Are you still around?
There were several people who did word wars the most frequently during NaNo; I’ll tag some of them, although there were others who joined in from time to time that would be great to see here!
@eden-anderson @anne_the_noob14 @emgc @r-m-archer @catwing @tinuviel @nuetrobolt I’m sure someone’s slipping my mind at the moment, but hopefully that helps get things started! 😀Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
Actually I am just about to leave, but I’ll be back at 5:00. Do you think you’ll still be here?
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan Hmm, I might. . . I think my family’s about to start baking cookies, but I’ll try to check back in once we’re done! 😀
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
Aw have fun! I am back; I was decorating a gingerbread house with my mom. 🙂 I’ll be here to word war for another 30-60 minutes, depending on when dinner is ready.
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan Ack, I’ve been too busy to write for fifteen straight minutes for a while! 😅 Hopefully I’ll be able to do one soon; I probably won’t be able to write tomorrow, though, since I have to finish physics. And next week I’ll be at my grandmother’s house, where I won’t have wifi to do word wars! I’ll have to check in whenever I have time, though! 😀
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
Girl, I totally get it. Time has wings. And it’s fast. And yeah, whenever you have the time! I work a full time job, so I probably won’t be able to war except on the weekends, and maybe evenings. *cringe*
ps. (tell Kiet hi and give him a hug for me, but don’t tell Grace in case she gets jealous)
"Write the vision, and make it plain on tablets, that he may run who reads it."
Habakkuk 2:2@hope-mcclellan 😉 Will do!
Grace: What did I hear you weren’t supposed to tell me?
Me: Um–nothing, just that–
Grace: *shrugs* I know you both like Kiet best. It’s fine. It isn’t like that offends me. I mean, he’s Kiet. I like him best, too.
Me: I mean. . . okay, fair point. Good to know. 😀
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
@hope-mcclellan Ooh, this is a great idea! I love this!! 😀
@naiya-dyani Thanks for tagging me!Either of you up for a word war right now?
"But how could you live and have no story to tell?" - Fyodor Dostoyevsky
@eden-anderson Hmm. . . I have an essay to write for school. Does that count? 😉
Hearts are like matter--they can be beaten down, torn, and burned, but they cannot be destroyed.
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