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  • #99004
    Ariella Newheart
    @ariella-newheart

    @quinn-ofallon You’re welcome! If it would make it any easier, I can read it over again and tell you the typos I found.

    Writer, illustrator, Parimi Alcan

    Check out my new blog! https://arbitraryfairy.wordpress.com/

    #99005
    Quinn O’Fallon
    @quinn-ofallon

    @ariella-newheart That would be great 🙂 Thanks! Between college and riding lessons, my brain is pretty bleh right now, so I’m probably reading right past all the typos anyways.

    #99006
    Ariella Newheart
    @ariella-newheart

    @quinn-ofallon No problem! I can’t do it tonight, but I’ll try tomorrow. 🙂

    Do you ride horses? My sister does, too.

    Writer, illustrator, Parimi Alcan

    Check out my new blog! https://arbitraryfairy.wordpress.com/

    #99049
    Ariella Newheart
    @ariella-newheart

    @quinn-ofallon Here’s what I found.

    If it wasn’t for the full moon above, the sprawling pagoda-like building would cast the whole courtyard in shadow, dwarfing the barracks lined on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

    Change to:

    dwarfing the barracks on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

    or

    dwarfing the barracks lining either side of the walled Watcher precinct.

     

    A decent enough plan, but with one pitfall–every heretic tries it, which means I have extensive practice cutting off anyone who tries that route.

    I would split this into two sentences rather than one joined by an em dash.

    As I run, I strain for a glimpse over the battlements..

    (There are two periods here)

    Panice tightens my throat.

    “Panic”

    And that’s all! 🙂

     

    Writer, illustrator, Parimi Alcan

    Check out my new blog! https://arbitraryfairy.wordpress.com/

    #99097
    Quinn O’Fallon
    @quinn-ofallon

    @ariella-newheart Thank you! That made fixing it much easier 🙂

    #99138
    overcomer
    @overcomer

    I just saw the words “Sci-Fi” and “Serial Story”. Let me at it! XD

    I’ll definitely be checking it out. Cool name, by the way, @quinn-ofallon. Is that your real name or a pseudonym?

    I can’t think of that word, “pseudonym” anymore without cracking up ever since my sister thought it was some kind of drug. XD

    We like to joke that Pseudonym is the deadliest drug for authors.

    • This reply was modified 1 year, 11 months ago by overcomer.
    #99261
    Quinn O’Fallon
    @quinn-ofallon

    @overcomer Thanks! It’s a pseudonym. It would be cool if it were my real name, though. My family has Irish heritage, so I chose it partially based off of that.

    #99276
    overcomer
    @overcomer

    Cool! My family has some Irish heritage as well. We used to think that our surname “O’Bier” was Irish too but it’s not. It’s actually French, or possibly even German. 🙂

    • This reply was modified 1 year, 11 months ago by overcomer.
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