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  • #43426
    Libby
    @libby

    I wrote a small riddle several months ago, and I was reading over it just now and wondering if it makes sense.  The verses aren’t that clear (though maybe they ought not to be since it’s a riddle) and can I make it better in any way?  Thanks!

    Where hurt abounds, it raises up,
    It lifts the hearts of men on earth
    Bringing purpose, crushes gloom,
    Arresting spirit at its birth

    It promises a brand-new start;
    A melancholy heart it cheers;
    When waiting in anxiety
    It gets the better of our fears.

    Where life exists it will be found,
    If even just a hint of it;
    And where ‘tis found, it cautions us
    The slightest fear not to permit.

    Though all of mankind seeks it out,
    It hides and waits ‘til one is found
    Who needs the power it affords,
    Then grants its gift with joy unbound.

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #43432
    Catherine Roche
    @writercatherine

    @libby Is the answer God?

    Ad Majorem Dei Gloriam - For the greater glory of God
    Catholic, student, bookdragon

    #43443
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @libby Is the answer ‘hope’?

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
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    #43446
    Catherine Roche
    @writercatherine

    @anne-of-lothlorien Oooh, that would also make sense. The line “Though all of mankind seeks it out” is what made me think God.

    Ad Majorem Dei Gloriam - For the greater glory of God
    Catholic, student, bookdragon

    #43475
    Libby
    @libby

    @anne-of-lothlorien and @writercatherine There are multiple ways to answer the riddle.  Hope was my original one, but there’s also love – which I like a lot.  Is it alright to have a few different answers?  Somehow, it doesn’t seem quite right.

    The last stanza also seems like it might cause a bit of confusion as to what the answer might be.  Would you have any suggestions?  Thanks guys!

    Also, sorry if my tags don’t work – still figuring out how to do all this. 😉

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #43479
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @libby, Yeah I think you could have different answers. Maybe. Maybe there’s rules for riddles. I’ll check. Google it, or whatever.

    The last part is actually what made me think hope first instead of God. Because I’d say people actually do look for hope before they look to God, I mean if they’re not Christians, that searching and looking for something more, something like hope to cling on to is what leads them to God.

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #43486
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    I don’t think there’s any rules about double answer riddles. I mean, there’s that tone from Alice in Wonderland that everyone has different solutions for. It’s your riddle, so go for whatever you want.

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #43506
    E.B. Raulands
    @e-b-raulands

    @libby
    You did a great job with this poem!
    I thought the answer could be the Cross/salvation because of the references to being lifted up in the first stanza. The lines “Arresting spirit at its birth/It promises a brand-new start” also made me think of how we are reborn spiritually when we are saved through Christ’s death on the cross.
    I wasn’t sure about lines 14-15 because they say that hope/love “hides and wait ’til one is found/Who needs the power it affords.” I never really thought of love and hope as being elusive or selective. Won’t they always be present in our lives whether we need them or not?

    To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

    #43603
    Libby
    @libby

    @e-b-raulands and @anne-of-lothlorien Thank you for your feedback.  E.B. Raulands, those last lines are something I have been a bit troubled about as well.  I think what I meant was that everyone tries to find hope in life, but rarely finds it.  But then…those other lines.  Do you have any suggestions that could help it to improve?

    How does this sound?

    Though all of mankind seeks it out,
    In worldly things ’tis rarely found;
    Yet there is one with power to grant
    This wondrous gift with joy unbound.

    Thank you all so much!

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #43604
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @libby Yes, yes, yes, that is sooo much better! *thumbs up* I like it!


    @e-b-raulands
    jsyk, I have that same doll that’s in your avatar XD

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #43605
    Libby
    @libby

    @anne-of-lothlorien Thank you 🙂  I’m so glad it’s better.

    By the way, I, too, spend way too much money on books!

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #43606
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @libby I think everyone on here does 😀

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #43714
    E.B. Raulands
    @e-b-raulands

    @libby
    I don’t think I have any other suggestions for your poem right now, but I do think the revisions you made to the last stanza are great! 🙂

    To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

    #43731
    Libby
    @libby

    @e-b-raulands Thanks, I’m so glad you like it better!

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #43752
    Catherine Roche
    @writercatherine

    @libby Those revisions made it much better! Great job!

    Ad Majorem Dei Gloriam - For the greater glory of God
    Catholic, student, bookdragon

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