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  • #55721
    A Kitchen Sink
    @hgm_barnes18

    So, uh, here’s a sorta rap/poem I wrote? XD It’s very raw and not my best work, but I do like it.

    Critiques are APPRECIATED! Criticism is the only way to improve.

    But I won’t kill you if you compliment it. Though I may have a hard time believing you. 😉

    "If you called out to the void loud enough... hard enough... would the void answer back?"

    #55757
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @hgm_barnes18

    So, I can’t find the poem you wanted to share… was there supposed to be a link?

    #55762
    A Kitchen Sink
    @hgm_barnes18

    @evelyn

    Well, darn, I plumb forgot to put it in! XD

    Here’s le link:

    https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jpsk67E7iBt8WQgeq9S_URccQtLWbTJ_oARHfvjBC4k/edit?usp=sharing

    "If you called out to the void loud enough... hard enough... would the void answer back?"

    #55881
    Hedges
    @h-jones

    Dadgum. Okay, so, this is really good. Naturally it has that kind of dark, edgy vibe – sort of like NF’s stuff – but all in all, I liked it a lot. Very well done. I liked the end particularly, because it offered hope. <3 A really enjoyable read, especially if you’re going through something difficult and kind of need words to put with your feelings. Again, a lot like some of NF’s stuff. xD

    Only critique I have is, it’s a little lengthy, which isn’t necessarily a problem but I’ve discovered that in the era of the short attention spans, people are more susceptible to short messages.

    Great job. <3

    Married a blacksmith, and now frequently uses his knowledge for writing fantasy.

    #55961
    A Kitchen Sink
    @hgm_barnes18

    @h-jones

    Thanks so much for your feedback! (Wow… are you an NF fan?! *tries not to get too excited*)

    I totally understand that critique, yeah. I’ll try to work on it. Thank you for reading!

    "If you called out to the void loud enough... hard enough... would the void answer back?"

    #57546
    Hedges
    @h-jones

    @hgm_barnes18 Ah, sorry this is late. xD I’m starting to be a fan of NF, yes! I discovered his music relatively recently. I think my favorite of his so far is I’ll Keep On. Such a great song. <3

    Totally worth the read! I enjoyed it. 🙂

    Married a blacksmith, and now frequently uses his knowledge for writing fantasy.

    #57553
    A Kitchen Sink
    @hgm_barnes18

    @h-jones

    Ah, yes. That’s a good one. 😀 I’ve been a fan since a little while after Perception came out, and it’s my favorite album. But I have too many favorite songs to keep up with… I think Real is one of them, though, and Remember This, and Know, and Wish You Wouldn’t, and I Just Wanna Know, and– oof, I’ll stop now.

    "If you called out to the void loud enough... hard enough... would the void answer back?"

    #57643
    I, David
    @i-david

    @h-jones Ah, yes. That’s a good one. 😀 I’ve been a fan since a little while after Perception came out, and it’s my favorite album. But I have too many favorite songs to keep up with… I think Real is one of them, though, and Remember This, and Know, and Wish You Wouldn’t, and I Just Wanna Know, and– oof, I’ll stop now.

    *Whispers* And Paralyzed, and How Could You Leave Us, and Outcast, and WHY, and No Name, and Let You Down, and… *Trails off, still muttering song names*

    Four
    INFP
    songwriter

    #57780
    A Kitchen Sink
    @hgm_barnes18

    @i-david yes, ofc. I couldn’t get to everything, so thanks. XD

    "If you called out to the void loud enough... hard enough... would the void answer back?"

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