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  • #41629
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

      I have this nice shiny red sketchbook, and trying to think of something to do with it, I decided to draw in it different pictures of different things! DUH, OF COURSE! But those things were not just going to be useless junky pages… hopefully. Then I decided to make a little poem to go with some of them, some of the pictures, whether they were of characters, about how my fancy guppy in my aquarium was being eaten by a tiger barb,  or just something else totally random.

      But even though I’m not quite finished with the first page of the sketchbook, this is the little poem that went with it:

      A grand book,

      A great look,

      And then, a winning rook

      Like those of a chess game.

      Which is not lame,

      But totally an incredible game

      Of this grand book!

      Just take one look

      Of this perfect book!

      I’m hoping this is good enough, but if there’s anything you think I should change, tell me.

      And if you have any other poem or anything related to that, you can most certainly come and post it here if you wish. *flares through the horizon on a gleaming red dragon, searching for anyone who is willing to give a poem*

      "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

      #41690
      E.B. Raulands
      @e-b-raulands

      @andrew
      I was on my way to write a post on “The Crimson Dove” when I stopped to read this. I like the way the rhyme flowed with the short lengths of lines 1-2 and 7-9 but was also a little confused by the chess image in the middle of the poem.

      What do you think of changing the word of in the last line to at?

      To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

      #41699
      Andrew Schmidt
      @andrew

        @e-b-raulands, okay. I can change the of to an at. When I wrote about the rook, it was supposed to be just one of the things in it and telling how great the book is… if that made sense. Perhaps I should change that part.

        "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

        #41788
        E.B. Raulands
        @e-b-raulands

        @andrew
        Oh no, that does make sense; I forgot there was an illustration to go with the poem.
        Should poems posted on this thread relate to a particular topic?

        • This reply was modified 2 years, 4 months ago by E.B. Raulands.

        To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

        #41818
        Andrew Schmidt
        @andrew

          @e-b-raulands, you can post whatever poem you want here. 🙂

          "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

          #41877
          E.B. Raulands
          @e-b-raulands

          @andrew
          Thank-you so much! I was hoping I could but wanted to make sure. =)
          This is a poem I wrote for…a reason that I don’t recall at the moment but am sure it was good at the time.

          Toad
          Hippity hippity hop!
          What a pleasant way to walk!
          Hop along the pavement,
          Hop around the pond,
          Hop among the pansies,
          Will I ever stop?
          Hippity hippity not!

          I’m not sure about the title or the word pleasant in the second line; what do you think?

           

          To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

          #41891
          Andrew Schmidt
          @andrew

            @e-b-raulands, that is a great poem! I like how you did it. The title is good, and the pleasant is also pleasant. (Get the pun?).

            "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

            #42035
            E.B. Raulands
            @e-b-raulands

            @andrew
            Thank-you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it!  =)  I’ll keep the title and pleasant the same in the poem.
            (And yes, I do get the pun!  =D )

            To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

            #42070
            Andrew Schmidt
            @andrew

              @e-b-raulands, okay! 🙂

              "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

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