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March 19, 2021 at 2:06 pm #126305
Beth Darlene
@beth20Hello fellow writers!
So, I am writing a short story it’s called Ashton and Estella for now. Haven’t come up with something better haha.
But anyway, I have an outline written out and I was wondering if I could get some eyes on it and see if it’s any good.
Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X23QV8hvrZIATvzhAFg6hzx5Z4qS1v5SCBsUGFJldKI/edit?usp=sharing Feel free to comment on the document =)
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March 19, 2021 at 2:08 pm #126306Beth Darlene
@beth20Tagging a couple of people, don’t feel pressured though. @kimlikesart @purpleturtle @olivia
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March 19, 2021 at 5:18 pm #126314Erynne
@erynneI wasn’t tagged but I can give you opinion ๐
I really like it!!! The suspense is really cool, and everything seems very well thought out. It’s definitely one I would read if I were to see it around somewhere. Also, I really like the names!
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Erynne.
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March 19, 2021 at 5:26 pm #126318Beth Darlene
@beth20@erynne Thank you! If I ever post snippets, do you want me to tag you?
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March 19, 2021 at 5:47 pm #126323Erynne
@erynneYes!! For sure! Thanks ๐
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March 19, 2021 at 6:02 pm #126324Beth Darlene
@beth20@erynne Okay, sounds good!
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March 19, 2021 at 10:09 pm #126332Zee
@zeeI like the idea for your story, @beth20. I think it could be quite good.
A few thoughts/questions…
What’s the setting? I’m assuming ancient or Medieval times, due to the presence of an Earl, but may be wrong.
Why does Ashton live with the Malum Draco? Is he the son of one of the members, or is he someone they’ve kidnapped and plan to sell? If his best friend was killed for defiance, it seems they might sell him on as quickly as possible to avoid that happening in his case, too.
If Estella’s parents are aware that she occasionally sneaks out without her bodyguard, why aren’t they panicking? Grounding her? Or do they not consider the potential threat that serious?
If the Malum Draco want Ashton back so badly they’d kidnap someone else from the place he’s staying in order to get him, why can’t/don’t they just kidnap him?
I’d like to see what you come up with, too, so please do share when you’re ready!
March 19, 2021 at 11:05 pm #126339Beth Darlene
@beth20Whatโs the setting? Iโm assuming ancient or Medieval times, due to the presence of an Earl, but may be wrong.
Yes. It’s Medieval time.
Why does Ashton live with the Malum Draco?
He was one of the children being trafficked.
If his best friend was killed for defiance, it seems they might sell him on as quickly as possible to avoid that happening in his case, too.
Yeah…except in one of the scenes that I wrote his friend is being harassed bc he won’t give one of the guards his necklace, Ashton is trying to get Elden to give it to them. So wasn’t really visibly defiant.
If Estellaโs parents are aware that she occasionally sneaks out without her bodyguard, why arenโt they panicking? Grounding her? Or do they not consider the potential threat that serious?
That is a good question…I’ll think about that lol
If the Malum Draco want Ashton back so badly theyโd kidnap someone else from the place heโs staying in order to get him, why canโt/donโt they just kidnap him?
Well, I thought bc he’s so paranoid and fearful they wouldn’t get a chance. But Estella is always confident and careless that she’d be easier to capture.
Iโd like to see what you come up with, too, so please do share when youโre ready!
Thank you! I will!
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March 20, 2021 at 9:33 am #126344PurpleTurtle
@purpleturtle@beth20 Thanks for tagging me! Also, you probably need to add more background to Ashton and Eldin. Where did they come from? Do they have parents? How did they get captured?
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March 20, 2021 at 8:09 pm #126399Beth Darlene
@beth20@purpleturtle Okay! Thanks for reading!
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March 20, 2021 at 8:44 pm #126407PurpleTurtle
@purpleturtle@beth20 No problem!
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March 21, 2021 at 3:34 pm #126426Olivia Catherine
@oliviaI left some comments on your outline. About plot and such. ๐
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March 21, 2021 at 10:22 pm #126441Beth Darlene
@beth20@olivia Hey! Thank you, I saw them!
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March 22, 2021 at 8:45 pm #126508Olivia Catherine
@olivia@beth20 Awesome! I like the story idea. ๐
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March 23, 2021 at 6:54 pm #126565Beth Darlene
@beth20I like the story idea.
Thank you!
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