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Y’all, I finally figured out what my book is about. If that doesn’t call for a celebration I don’t know what does.
Do you wanna hear what it’s about?
My last working brain cell named Brian: “No they don’t, Erynne. Get lost nobody cares”
Me: “be quiet Brian I wasn’t talking to you”
Brian: “you’re literally talking to yourself right now, do you honestly think they want to hear anything that comes from you?”
Me: “you keeping thinking like that you’ll be the next brain cell to go”
Brian: “hurts you more than it hurts me”
Me: “would you stop reminding me and let me tell this plot”
Brian: ” don’t say I didn’t warn you”
Plot for Erynne Can’t Share My Last Name’s book possibly titled Blood Type or Give me Death:
All is well in Kimberlin’s world. She just started her first job, her sister is expecting a baby boy, and her brother-in-law just graduated from med school.
The end!
Lol you saw that coming…
After a strange and very random bombing in a nearby city, everything goes crazy. Prices skyrocket and people go insane. The solution a wealthy business owner comes up with is for people to sell their guns to him.
After some time things start to go back to normal.
Soon after a strange sickness (not covid) spreads through the country. When this happens Kimberlin’s dad and brother-in-law start disappearing through the night. When they refuse to tell the family anything Kimberlin sneaks out and follows them. She gets led down a dark alley to a small shed. On the inside she sees syringes and tubes filled with blood, but worst of all she sees her dad and Jack (her brother-in-law) working with all of it.
She decides to confront them the next morning except they aren’t there. After no sign of either man for several days they receive a phone call. As you probably guessed, it’s dad. He swears they’re both alright but they won’t be returning home. Ever. The phone call ends with a gunshot after in the background Jack is heard yelling “it’s them they’re doing-”
The rest of the first novel is Kimberlin figuring out the truth about everything and the second is her doing something about it.
Thoughts?
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
@erynne omgoodnessgravy that’s crazy XD
CAN I JUST SAY THAT EVERYONE NAMED JACK DIES. I’m not kidding.
Sounds cool though XD
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
IF YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT THE TITANIC I AM GOING TO SCREAM. That’s who I named him after… I’m not going to hide the fact that I have a huge crush on Leo. Young Leo not old Leo
Other than that do you actually like it or are you just being nice?😂
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
@erynne No I’m talking about multiple other Jacks.
Im being honest lol
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
That’s not fair. The titanic needs to be one of them
Ok great XD
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
@erynne I’ve never seen it tho. Have you watched a show called When calls the heart?
yep!
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
@Emma-walker nope lol
You do have a point tho Jacks always die
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
Lol @erynne them don’t, stick with the books.
Yea. Except I have a character named Jakk, and his excuse for not dying is that his name is spelled differently- *realizes something* OH SHUTE Not Jack!
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
😂😂😂 sounds like Jakk just turned into a Jack
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
@erynne no no no Jakk is fine.
Bit I just remembered that my cousin and I are writing a superhero story and one of the kids is named Jack. And he was my favorite oneee"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
On the inside she sees syringes and tubes filled with blood, but worst of all she sees her dad and Jack (her brother-in-law) working with all of it.
This, along with the craziness after it, got my attention. 🙂
If you build a good outline, I say go for it, but lay the mystery and ominous feeling on thick.
@erynne Hey, thanks for sharing the book idea! Sounds like the basis for a fun and intense thriller. The main point of feedback I have is that thrillers like this generally resolve in one book and don’t extend into a whole series, unless you’re specifically writing a trilogy for a youngish YA audience where you focus on a giant set piece in each individual book with the promise of resolving the overarching plot in a third book. Is there a reason your character doesn’t “do something about it” in the first book?
"...the one with whom he so sought to talk has already interceded for him." -The Master and Margarita
@emma-walker awww that stinks. I’m starting a petition to save Jack. Who’s in?
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
This, along with the craziness after it, got my attention.
If you build a good outline, I say go for it, but lay the mystery and ominous feeling on thick.
Hey great! I’m glad blood gets your attention, that’s a good thing for an axe murderer
I am planning on this being a veryyyy mysterious and suspenseful book to keep the readers on the edge of their seat. I love books like that
Tbh, I got nervous when I saw you replied to this because you’re really good at critiquing 😂 (that’s a compliment, I promise) I’m sure your writing is excellent because of that.
Anyways, the reason I’m doing a series is because there is just so much happening and I feel like I should separate it into two books so it’s not too overwhelming. I left out a ton of info above. Kimberlin’s sister’s baby boy ends up dying which reveals a huge piece in the puzzle, and the bombing isn’t as mysterious as it seems once she looks at the facts she’s gathered. There’s just a pot happening
The second book will pick up right where the first one left off. What do you think?
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.
@erynne Lol please save Jack XD
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth Elliott
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