December 23, 2021 at 2:13 pm #146160
Thank you both for your feedback!
I’m not used to working with such a small word count, so it was helpful to see the areas that I need to polish.
Is it part of a larger story, or is it just this scene?
It is part of a much larger story, at least I want it to be. Right now it’s still in the developing stages but I have high hopes for it’s future. 😁 I didn’t explain this in my submission, but the books Soren insisted were so important to the mission are actually to help her master her special ability called Vir manipulation, which is sort of like the world’s magic system.
Also, Parr is an apprentice dragon trainer.
What I know in my head and what I believe in my heart are two entirely different things.December 23, 2021 at 2:52 pm #146161Noah Cochran@noah-cochranDecember 23, 2021 at 2:58 pm #146162December 23, 2021 at 3:01 pm #146163
What I know in my head and what I believe in my heart are two entirely different things.December 23, 2021 at 4:20 pm #146169K. A. Grey@k-a-grey
@winter_rose Congratulations! Hey, do you want to throw out a new prompt for us?
@Emily-waldorf Don’t be too hard on yourself, you did great! Would you like to join in the next prompt? I think this little exercise helps us all see our weak points, but that means we can work on becoming better writers! Maybe next time when writing an argument, you can try to see if the character’s reactions are proportional to the “trigger.” You can actually get the reader interested in the dialogue, even if it’s about coffee filters, if they can relate. So maybe more of some playful banter going on instead of a full-blown argument.December 23, 2021 at 4:38 pm #146171
Thanks for the advice! I might join–I think I’ll wait on the prompt and to see how much time I have. 🙂
Your life is not your own so keep your hands off it. ~Sherlock HolmesDecember 23, 2021 at 8:31 pm #146181
Prompt: Two characters are both trying to hide from each other something they shouldn’t have. Each character is suspicious of the other.
If that one doesn’t sound like it will work I can try to come up with a different prompt.
What I know in my head and what I believe in my heart are two entirely different things.December 23, 2021 at 9:47 pm #146198K. A. Grey@k-a-grey
@winter_rose That prompt sounds perfect! Before I say I’ll join though, I’ll see who is joining and who would be willing to be a judge for this round. Also, since Christmas Eve is tomorrow, let’s extend the deadline to Monday instead.
Also, Noah is the only guy right now.😅 Do you know of any more guys or gals who might want to join?December 23, 2021 at 10:13 pm #146208Emma Walker@emma-walker
@storysmith is the only other guy I remember his tag name XD
i might could do that. We will see.
"If your goal is purity in heart, be prepared to be thought very odd." -Elisabeth ElliottDecember 23, 2021 at 10:46 pm #146209Joshua Scheele@storysmithDecember 23, 2021 at 10:47 pm #146211Emma Walker@emma-walkerDecember 24, 2021 at 11:44 am #146259
@k-a-grey I will probably not join this one, unless contestants are needed. I could judge, however. 🙂
Your life is not your own so keep your hands off it. ~Sherlock HolmesDecember 26, 2021 at 4:04 pm #146297Erynne@erynne
Where are we at on this?
Be weird. Be random. Be who you are. Because you ever know who would love the person you hide.December 26, 2021 at 10:21 pm #146306
Where are we at on this?
Deadline ends tomorrow night. I’m a judge.
Your life is not your own so keep your hands off it. ~Sherlock HolmesDecember 27, 2021 at 12:04 am #146307
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