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October 15, 2018 at 10:07 am #52918Parker Hankins@parker
@libby, thanks!! I’ll be sure to post it here!!
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October 16, 2018 at 11:05 am #53207Dakota@dakota@parker Yes! Feel free to post any poetry you write.
Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.October 16, 2018 at 11:17 am #53217Parker Hankins@parker@dakota, all right!! Thanks!
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October 16, 2018 at 11:27 am #53229Dakota@dakota@parker @evelyn @andrew @libby @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist @katthewriter @e-b-raulands
This one I wrote the summer of 2017. It started one night as I was standing in the driveway, watching the fireflies among the trees. I was moved thinking about how our Creator had made the little guys but I started working on the inspiration, I thought “This song could have an allegorical meaning as well. This is the result.
Fireflies
Standing lonely on the lane,
Feeling small and full of pain,
I gaze down the long, long road.
Seeing nothing on the Right-
Drifting toward the Left tonight-
A search for answers is misplaced.
Turnings eyes back to the right,
Catching a streak of light,
A firefly goes dancing by.
Darkness flecked at once with sparks.
Millions of tiny arcs
Start to gather all around.
Fireflies flashing their lights,
Signaling some hope to me;
Reminder that He loves and cares
Rescuing wretches like me.
Blinking bright among the trees,
Resting on the emerald leaves,
The fireflies light up the night.
Flashing stars fly through the air
Splashing light everywhere
A testimony to His care
Jesus, I am kneeling down
Upon this holy ground
To thank You for fireflies.
Ones that journey along with me
Showing me truth. I see
A testimony to Christ’s love.
Standing peaceful on the lane
Knowing truth and love’s refrain
I smile at the long, long road.
As always, comments and critiques are welcome.
“Let the words of my mouth and the meditation of my heart be acceptable in thy sight, O LORD, my Strength and my Redeemer.” Psalm 19:14
Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.October 16, 2018 at 11:40 am #53237The Fledgling Artist@the-fledgling-artist@dakota Very nice!
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October 16, 2018 at 11:48 am #53240Parker Hankins@parkerWow, @dakota!! Beautiful!!!! It’s amazing how simple fireflies can be, yet they are really a gift and something to thank God for!! Very good!!
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October 16, 2018 at 12:06 pm #53255Dakota@dakota@parker and @the-fledgling-artist Thank you!
Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.October 16, 2018 at 12:08 pm #53257Parker Hankins@parkerMy pleasure!!
Living in a world of mystery and dangerous predicaments while working with the AWESOME Meraki's.
October 16, 2018 at 12:34 pm #53268October 16, 2018 at 3:43 pm #53310Andrew Schmidt@andrew@Dakota, I love the fireflies. They’re fun to watch at night.
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Me: "Write every inch of your future."October 16, 2018 at 5:26 pm #53330Katthewriter@katthewriter@dakota That’s amazing! and thanks for tagging me, but i’m
awful,no horrible at poetry and could never write a song. I tried once and it was *horrible*.October 16, 2018 at 5:31 pm #53333Jane Maree@jane-maree@dakota Ahhhh I love it!
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October 16, 2018 at 6:19 pm #53341Jenna Terese@jenwriter17@dakota Beautiful and moving. 🙂
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www.jennaterese.comOctober 16, 2018 at 9:12 pm #53358Brink@nuetrobolt@dakota, I love fireflies, and I love this song/poem. Beautiful. Keep up the good work!
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October 16, 2018 at 9:17 pm #53361E.B. Raulands@e-b-raulands@dakota
You did a wonderful job with this song! The one suggestion I have is to maybe change light to embers in the line “Splashing light everywhere” to add some assonance and help it flow a little more smoothly.
I’d love to hear this put to music! (I was singing along as I read but am not sure I got the tune right. 🙂 )- This reply was modified 5 years, 5 months ago by E.B. Raulands.
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