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  • #107415
    Libby
    @libby

    @dakota This is so, so beautiful.  I’m afraid I don’t see anything that bothers me or that could be improved… which is a good thing 🙂  I just want you to know that this is truly a powerful piece, beautiful in its truth.  It’s a song I’d like to sing everyday if I could <3

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #107440
    Warden
    @nuetrobolt

    @dakota nice!

    Your story is yours and no one else's. Each sunset is different, depending where you stand. -A. Peterson

    #107472
    Dakota
    @dakota

    @nuetrobolt @libby

    Thank you so much! Maybe someday you will be able to sing it . . . if I ever become a good enough composer, because I’d love to set this one to music.

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #107480
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

      @Dakota, awesome work!

      "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

      #107570
      Andrew Schmidt
      @andrew

        @Dakota, alright, here’s the next poem in Botanical Tales – The Daisy, the Poppy, and the Lily – but perhaps the last in this various flower-dominated collection. I know it’s only a collections of four poems so far, but, just letting you know. Anyway, here goes this odd poem!

         

        The Daisy, the Poppy, the Lily…

        Chat ever quite silly.

        All remain splendorous friends; therefore,

        Laughter and gladness descends.

         

        Intricate is the Daisy’s design:

        Striking white petals,

        A center of gold,

        Her smile ever gentle and kind.

         

        Rustling in the wind gleams a stunning display.

        The Poppy’s blood red petals,

        As well her creative play

        And entertainment, are quite admired.

         

        The Lily, precious and sweet, having patterns

        Of black polka dots resembling drops of ink,

        Petals bright and gorgeous pink,

        Laughs and laughs chirpily…

         

        The Daisy ain’t ever lazy.

        She serves willingly.

        The Poppy ain’t ever sloppy

        In her fancy performance.

        The Lily ain’t ever jealous, really―

        She is an enchanted and wondrous flower

        Amongst those in the beauteous garden.

         

        The Daisy, the Poppy, and the Lily

        Are several dazzling flowers

        Sparkling in pleasure and delight,

        Flashing in glamorous sunlight!

        "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

        #107773
        Dakota
        @dakota

        @andrew I like it! It has a very joyful, almost bouncy feel to it.

        Just a curious question, why did you choose to star all three flowers in the same poem?

        Btw, your new forum tag is very funny!

        • This reply was modified 7 months, 4 weeks ago by Dakota.

        Psalm 119:11
        Your word I have hidden in my heart,
        That I might not sin against You.

        #107866
        Andrew Schmidt
        @andrew

          @Dakota

          I chose to have the several kinds of flowers to show all the variety and differences between each other, as well as friendships to others that are different. That’s kind of where I’m coming from… Thank you for reading! 😀

          "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

          #109010
          Dakota
          @dakota

          @parker @vic @andrew @libby @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist @urwen-starial @e-b-raulands @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

          Okay, this one I just finished. I wanted to write this one ever since last fall but I just couldn’t get -get it! In the end, the fear that COVID-19 created and reading Psalms 46:1-3, 10 and Psalms 56; 3 and 4 that finally helped me get it right.

          Enjoy!

          (Whenever I am) Afraid
          The fear is strong and I’m helpless in his face
          For his barrage I brace and seek a place
          Where I am safe from his fierce rage.

          Can SomeOne help, on my behalf interfere?
          Who controls these things that I fear?
          O Lord, I cry, can You hear me down here?

          Though the earth should tremble and quake
          The ground beneath my feet should crumble and break
          And the land be left rubble in its wake.
          Still the Tower Strong stands sure.

          Though the mountains be overthrown
          And cast into the sea. Those peaks always known
          And loved sink, ever lost under the foam.
          Still the Eternal One remains.

          Though the seas arise and invade
          The cities. Roaring winds and waves ’round them arrayed
          With boiling rage raze with liquid blade.
          Still the Almighty’s in control

          Whatever time I am afraid
          Whenever my heart’s trembling
          As forces around me are assembling
          Whatever may my strength crumble
          As, faint and anxious, I falter and stumble
          Whenever I can look to Him
          Who controls these things that I fear.
          O Lord, I cry, for You hear me down here!

          In this moment fear I must still
          And know He is God and always has and will
          His children here He watches over ’til
          The Ev’rlasting Father calls them home.

          In Him Whose Word I will praise I trust, for
          He’s exalted high. Man can’t ignore
          That He is King. Nations will bow before
          Him who’s throne shall ever endure.

          Whatever time I am afraid
          Whenever my heart’s trembling
          As forces around me are assembling
          Whatever may my strength crumble
          As, faint and anxious, I falter and stumble
          Whenever I can look to Him
          Who controls these things that I fear.
          O Lord, I cry, for You hear me down here!

          Can depth or height? Can any strength or power?
          Can floods erase or the flames devour?
          Can angels part or the demons divide?
          Can heaven high or oceans so wide?
          Can death or any living thing
          Separate me from this Almighty King?

          The Lord can help, on my behalf interfere.
          He controls these things that I fear.
          O Lord, I cry, for You hear me down here!

          Psalm 119:11
          Your word I have hidden in my heart,
          That I might not sin against You.

          #109716
          Dakota
          @dakota

          @parker @vic @andrew @libby @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist @urwen-starial @e-b-raulands @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

          This a revision of song I wrote a while ago. Critique as hard as you want and enjoy!

          The Surrendering

          I’m down to my last defense.
          I heard that You’re invading this land;
          So I locked my heart with rusted bars and took a stand.
          But I had no idea of the power of Your offense.
          The last wall wobbles, then comes crumbling down.
          There’s nothing now of my fortress which I prided;
          It couldn’t survive when our forces collided.
          It’s either surrender or die fighting the Crown.
          Your law, Your sword, means death eternally;
          I must surrender to receive the delegates of mercy.

          This is the surrendering.
          I’m stopping trying to repair this rampart
          That at Your glance will just fall apart.
          This is the surrendering.
          I’m letting the white flag fly high.
          I’m lifting my hands up to the sky.
          Conqueror, come in and control my soul.
          I must relinquish and give You my heart whole.
          This must be the surrendering.

          I’m subject to You, my King.
          I thought vassal to You would be slavery,
          But I find everlasting liberty.
          I’m bondman and yet am free to sing.
          The defeat of my felony and sin
          Produces sweetest service to my Lord,
          One Who I should have ever adored.
          Gone are my days of being an assassin.

          My ways, my strife means death eternally.
          I must obey to receive the blessings from Your store.

          This is my surrendering.
          Stooping my selfishness to be
          Accepting of the burden You give me.
          This is my surrendering.
          Finding pleasure in serving You Majesty,
          Pursuing to be a daughter of royalty,
          All earthy shields I have flung behind.
          In You my purpose must be defined.
          This must be the surrendering.

          I quench the selfish battle cry
          And my voice in prayer to the sky.
          I lower my own feeble sword
          And raise the white flag to You Lord.
          If rumbles of rebellion near my mind,
          Lord, I pray that those rebels I will bind.
          Never relent to their selfish ways –
          Always to give You every one of my days.

          Psalm 119:11
          Your word I have hidden in my heart,
          That I might not sin against You.

          #109717
          Dakota
          @dakota

          @kari-karast


          @tdprince


          @w-o-holmes


          @naiya-dyani


          @urwen-starial

          Lyrical Poems are Welcome here!

          PS @everyoneItagged – Hoping and praying that you all are staying safe and that your needs are met. The Lord is our refuge and strength. 🙂

          Psalm 119:11
          Your word I have hidden in my heart,
          That I might not sin against You.

          #109767
          Andrew Schmidt
          @andrew

            @Dakota, nice poems there… 😀 I like them.

            "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

            #110989
            Dakota
            @dakota

            @parker @vic @andrew @libby @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist @urwen-starial @e-b-raulands @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

            YIKES!! Sorry guys, I forgot to post this past week.

            This one came from a sorta random inspiration. I was sitting, thinking about something and there it was. Hope you guys like it! But it’s okay if you must critique it heartlessly!! 😉

            Melt the Miles (Between Our Two Hearts)

            I’m sitting here, staring at the screen
            As those jet black letters jump out at me
            Screaming about your tragedy

            I type out ‘I’m sorry’ on the screen
            Somehow those two words seem empty to me
            No heart, no soul, no sympathy

            Yet I can’t write what I would say if I
            Could see you, if I could hug you, and cry.
            I can not type words that I would pray with you if we could be on our knees

            Oh, how I wish the miles
            Could melt away between our two hearts
            I’ll have to fake the smiles
            While inside my heart’s splinters apart
            I want to be with you
            I want to help you struggle through
            But there’s too many miles
            Between our two broken, breaking hearts
            I am here just aching to comfort you
            I can’t. It seems that falling apart apart from you is all I can do

            I press ‘send’. The email flies away
            While I lay my head in my hands. Tears fall
            Wish I knew your number, wish I could call

            I just wish you weren’t so far away
            Wish there was no hole, no ache in your heart
            Wish I could take the dart of the sting of this tragedy. But I can’t.

            I know that I can pray for you always
            But the longing just won’t leave me alone
            Inside my heart aches and with each moan

            I have to pray words I would say if I
            Could remind you that He’s with you and cry.
            I have to pray He will hold you, He will comfort you. I’m here on my knees.

            Oh, how I wish the miles
            Could melt away between our two hearts
            I’ll have to fake the smiles
            While inside my heart’s splinters apart
            I want to be with you
            I want to help you struggle through
            But there’s too many miles
            Between our two broken, breaking hearts
            I am here just aching to comfort you
            I can’t. It seems that falling apart apart from you is all I can do

            We have to lift our hearts
            Up to Him Who hears and heals every contrite soul
            Jesus, he can console
            Every aching and breaking part of our hearts

            Yet how I wish the miles
            Could melt away between our two hearts
            I’ll have to fake the smiles
            While inside my heart’s splinters apart
            I know He’ll be with you
            I know that He will carry through
            And the too many miles
            Cannot keep you apart from His arms.
            But still I’m here longing to comfort you
            I can’t. But I know falling apart apart from you’s not all I will do

            I’m sitting here, staring at the screen
            As those jet black letters jump out at me.

            Psalm 119:11
            Your word I have hidden in my heart,
            That I might not sin against You.

            #110990
            Dakota
            @dakota

            @kari-karast


            @tdprince


            @w-o-holmes


            @naiya-dyani


            @urwen-starial

            Lyrical Poems are Welcome here!

            Psalm 119:11
            Your word I have hidden in my heart,
            That I might not sin against You.

            #111028
            Urwen Starial
            @urwen-starial

              @dakota

              Beautiful!

              Thank you for sharing this with me.

               

              "Peace in our time. Imagine that."

              #111034
              Dakota
              @dakota

              @urwen-starial  Thank you and you’re welcome!

              Psalm 119:11
              Your word I have hidden in my heart,
              That I might not sin against You.

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