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  • #95780

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @andrew Thanks!

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #95937

    William Norfleet
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota; If people have said it once it is said a thousand: This is great! You should write some more!

    @jane-maree; You as well deserve some compliment, so very well done. Both your works are very well done and thoroughly enjoyable.

    @libby; This was great too, very artistic – did you have a scene in front of you? I usually get inspiration from a picture or a scene.

    I loved the word choice on all of yours.

    "Eistret an guol nuurdor ank dohk remna lathlrao."- Uondon of Andim

    #96053

    Jane Maree
    @jane-maree

    @w-o-holmes Aw, thank you! 🥰

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    #96058

    William Norfleet
    @w-o-holmes

    Um, your welcome (cough) I just realized that there were seventeen more panels here and not just the first one…whoops, huh? (heh-heh-heh) I find I’m doing that a lot. Well, anyway, the poems on the first panel were still great!

    "Eistret an guol nuurdor ank dohk remna lathlrao."- Uondon of Andim

    #96277

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @w-o-holmes Thank you and welcome to the thread!

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96285

    William Norfleet
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota (gosh!) Thanks!

    "Eistret an guol nuurdor ank dohk remna lathlrao."- Uondon of Andim

    #96860

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

    Enjoy and critique!

     

    Just Me
    Lord, it is just me again
    Just a girl with her heart all broken
    Up in pieces from things she’s chosen
    Lord, it’s just me here again.

    Lord, it has been a long day
    Just keep on struggling to obey
    Try to honor You in all I say
    Oh, it has been a long day

    Lord, it is hard to always
    Give thanks in all these dark days
    Sorrow seems to be stronger than praise
    Yes, it’s hard to do always

    Lord, can I come as just me
    Just praying, pleading up to Thee?
    Life can leave me in my misery.
    Please, can I come as just me?

    Lord, it’s You that I should crave
    Every day serving you like a slave
    Fears I’ll forsake, trials I will brave
    Lord, it’s You that I should crave

    Lord, it’s just me here praying
    Just asking that I’d be displaying
    You as One Who’s Word is unshaking
    Here I am, just me, praying

    Though it’s just me and a song
    Just maybe You will use us erelong
    After all, it is to You that I belong
    Oh, please use me and this song!

    Lord, it’s just me here again
    Just Your girl with guitar and pen
    Adopted as one of Your children
    Lord, I come to You as Just me.

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96861

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @kari-karast

    @tdprince

     

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96867

    William Norfleet
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota

    Wow, this is great! The only things I could see wrong were in the second to last stanza, you forgot to add a space between “ere” and “long”. Btw, that’s one of my favourite words.

    Also, in the last line in the last two words, you capitalized the “j” in “Just me”. Not sure if you meant to, but otherwise, it was awesome!

    "Eistret an guol nuurdor ank dohk remna lathlrao."- Uondon of Andim

    #97258

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @w-o-holmes Thanks for pointing that out! 🙂 Usually I just copy and paste the words from my original document and only take a brief check to be sure nothing is grossly misspelled.

    That’s why I ask for the critique! 🙂

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

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