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  • #95780

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @andrew Thanks!

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #95937

    Leon Fleming
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota; If people have said it once it is said a thousand: This is great! You should write some more!

    @jane-maree; You as well deserve some compliment, so very well done. Both your works are very well done and thoroughly enjoyable.

    @libby; This was great too, very artistic – did you have a scene in front of you? I usually get inspiration from a picture or a scene.

    I loved the word choice on all of yours.

    #96053

    Jane Maree
    @jane-maree

    @w-o-holmes Aw, thank you! 🥰

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    #96058

    Leon Fleming
    @w-o-holmes

    Um, your welcome (cough) I just realized that there were seventeen more panels here and not just the first one…whoops, huh? (heh-heh-heh) I find I’m doing that a lot. Well, anyway, the poems on the first panel were still great!

    #96277

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @w-o-holmes Thank you and welcome to the thread!

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96285

    Leon Fleming
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota (gosh!) Thanks!

    #96860

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

    Enjoy and critique!

     

    Just Me
    Lord, it is just me again
    Just a girl with her heart all broken
    Up in pieces from things she’s chosen
    Lord, it’s just me here again.

    Lord, it has been a long day
    Just keep on struggling to obey
    Try to honor You in all I say
    Oh, it has been a long day

    Lord, it is hard to always
    Give thanks in all these dark days
    Sorrow seems to be stronger than praise
    Yes, it’s hard to do always

    Lord, can I come as just me
    Just praying, pleading up to Thee?
    Life can leave me in my misery.
    Please, can I come as just me?

    Lord, it’s You that I should crave
    Every day serving you like a slave
    Fears I’ll forsake, trials I will brave
    Lord, it’s You that I should crave

    Lord, it’s just me here praying
    Just asking that I’d be displaying
    You as One Who’s Word is unshaking
    Here I am, just me, praying

    Though it’s just me and a song
    Just maybe You will use us erelong
    After all, it is to You that I belong
    Oh, please use me and this song!

    Lord, it’s just me here again
    Just Your girl with guitar and pen
    Adopted as one of Your children
    Lord, I come to You as Just me.

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96861

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @kari-karast

    @tdprince

     

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #96867

    Leon Fleming
    @w-o-holmes

    @dakota

    Wow, this is great! The only things I could see wrong were in the second to last stanza, you forgot to add a space between “ere” and “long”. Btw, that’s one of my favourite words.

    Also, in the last line in the last two words, you capitalized the “j” in “Just me”. Not sure if you meant to, but otherwise, it was awesome!

    #97258

    Dakota
    @dakota

    @w-o-holmes Thanks for pointing that out! 🙂 Usually I just copy and paste the words from my original document and only take a brief check to be sure nothing is grossly misspelled.

    That’s why I ask for the critique! 🙂

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #97376

    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

      @dakota: I love it!

      “Just Your girl with guitar and pen” is my favorite line in the poem!

      (ISFP!) Artistic, redheaded, nature-loving, crazy writer. Mine favorite Indiana animal: Red Fox.

      #97490

      Dakota
      @dakota

      @andrew Thanks! I like that line too. 🙂

      Psalm 119:11
      Your word I have hidden in my heart,
      That I might not sin against You.

      #97669

      Dakota
      @dakota

      @parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

      I don’t often write lullabies, but I was inspired so . . . here it is. Enjoy and critique!

      Blue Yonder Lullaby
      Sometimes I can’t help but wonder
      What is beyond the blue yonder
      Is there anyone who sees me
      What if these dark heavens are empty

      Am I really left all alone
      Small and lonely without a home
      Here I am, a crying child,
      In a cold wilderness so wild.

      Above the skies fade into black
      Huddled down, I cry with my back
      To the chilly winds of the North
      From the bitterness that’s blowing forth

      As the light fades into night
      It brims with stars twinkling bright
      But one shines brighter than the rest
      Singing a song of hope, it attests.

      Someone lives beyond the sky
      Remember He stays ever nigh
      He’s listens to the lonely cries
      Up to Him lift your teary eyes

      He, Who crafted creation,
      Hearkens to each supplication
      He cares for all the things He made
      By His hand lilies are arrayed

      He, Who reigns with majesty
      Sent to us divine royalty
      His Son for all the people died
      On that day He was crucified

      He, Who did these awesome deeds
      Cares and provides for all our needs
      He knows sometimes we feel alone
      So invites to be His own.

      Now gazing above in wonder
      I know there is none Who’s fonder
      With this Lord to cradle this heart
      As His I’ll live wholly set apart

      Psalm 119:11
      Your word I have hidden in my heart,
      That I might not sin against You.

      #97670

      Dakota
      @dakota

      @kari-karast

      @tdprince

       

      Blue Yonder Lullaby

      Psalm 119:11
      Your word I have hidden in my heart,
      That I might not sin against You.

      #97711

      Andrew Schmidt
      @andrew

        @dakota: This poem is so good… Thank you once again! Keep writing! 😀

        (ISFP!) Artistic, redheaded, nature-loving, crazy writer. Mine favorite Indiana animal: Red Fox.

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