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    Dakota
    @dakota

    @jane-maree @jillifish @parker @esther-sears @e-b-raulands   @mariposa  @andrew   @writercatherine  @daeus-lamb  @wordsmith @serenity @ericawordsmith   (If you are not interested in poetry, than ignore the fact that I tagged you. I just tagged a bunch of you (most of you I have previously interacted with on SE ) so there would be a ‘ multitude of counselors’. If you know anybody would be interested in this, please send them over.)

    OKAY! (deep breath) I’m going to launch a new poetry thread for those who have written more lyrical poems. Feel free to add yours. All poetry experts-feel free to critique and encourage.

     

    So here’s mine . . .  “No Other Way but This”

    If the path to Calvary I pass by,
    Heaven’s glory shall never brighten my eye;
    To reach the new Paradise and its bliss,
    There is no other way to walk but this.
    Rugged is the way and rough is the cross
    Yet I must take it up or all life is lost.

    If the kingdom of heaven I would seek,
    I must serve as a servant, lowly and meek.
    To reign in the kingdom of His bliss,
    There is no other way to work but this.
    Serving for my King-’tis nobler a part;
    So please give me a truer and nobler heart.

    If the crown of eternal life I’d win,
    I must conquer the tyrant of self within.
    To rest in the land of perfect bliss,
    There is no other war to wage but this.
    Mighty is the foe and long is the race;
    Yet I must endure all, for naught can replace.

    If to claim only Christ seems a harsh creed,
    Remember that the rewards shall far exceed.
    To reach the new Paradise and its bliss,
    There is no other way to walk but this.
    Rugged is the way and rough is the cross;
    Yet I must take it up or all is lost. 
    Feel free to speak up, point out any flaws or make any suggestions ( or give any praise) you like.

    For my Audience of One, all the glory be!

     

    • This topic was modified 2 years, 9 months ago by Dakota.

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #46285
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    @dakota, nice poem! 🙂

    Tagging some people: the-fledgling artist, jenwriter17, @nuetrobolt, evelyn, @wordsmith, @carolyn-matthew.

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #46287
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    Tags I misspelled because of my Mr. Bad Habit: @evelyn and @carolyn-matthews

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #46289
    Dakota
    @dakota

    @andrew Thank you- for your opinion and for tagging Wordsmith for me! 🙂  For some reason my computer wouldn’t tag him.

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #46303
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    @dakota, you’re welcome. 🙂

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #46310
    Andrew Schmidt
    @andrew

    Grhhh. *just realizes* I forgot to tag these tags right too: @jenwriter17 & @the-fledgling-artist.

    It seems I have been doing things like this recently. I’ll try to prevent it. But oh well. I did really well in grammar, but here I am making mistakes… and I would edit the mistakes, but I’m afraid I don’t know how to do that.

    *straightens* Now enough of that. I’m not trying to make my all errors known to SE. *rolls eyes at the keyboard, then continues writing*

    "Muhahaha!"- Unknown Villain

    #46312
    Dakota
    @dakota

    @andrew It’s ok. Trust me. I’m not a professional anything, much less a typist or orator.  🙂

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #46322
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @andrew Mr. Bad Habit is an annoying being!! Just don’t send him my way… I run into him waaay too often. 😉


    @dakota
    Great idea to start this thread. I love your poem by the way! It’s beautiful and reminds me of the dying art of hymns. I wish our culture as a whole would write and sing more hymns. They are just so beautiful and rich.

    The majority of my poems aren’t very lyrical, but I have tried my hand at songs before. I just wish I had the voice and talent to sing and create music to go along with them!! Haha, maybe I’ll get my brother’s band to add it to their Ep. 😉

     

    #46350
    The Fledgling Artist
    @the-fledgling-artist

    @dakota  That was great, thank you for sharing it with us! I agree with Evelyn, it would make a beautiful hymn.  How long have you been writing poetry? You’re quite good at it!

    "Though I'm not yet who I will be, I'm no longer who I was."

    #46351
    Parker Hankins
    @parker

    Oh, this is so beautiful!!! I love it!!!!!

    Living in a world of mystery and dangerous predicaments while working with the AWESOME Meraki's.

    #46366
    Jenna Terese
    @jenwriter17

    @dakota This is BEAUTIFUL! 😀

    "If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
    www.jennaterese.com

    #46388
    Jane Maree
    @jane-maree

    @dakota I love this!! Have you put it to music or anything yet?

     

    This is one of my songs that I’ve written, I’m thinking about recording it at some point too. 😀 It’s called Be Still.

     

    See the glory in the heavens, majesty proclaimed
    Endless hallelujah, all the earth shouts His name
    His handiwork declares his grace
    Creation rises, singing praise

     

    {Chorus}

    So be still and listen
    All creation points to Him
    Lift your eyes and see His grace
    Creator, Artist, Author, King

     

     

    See the wonder in the sunrise, colour echoing
    A thousand shades of beauty, singing glory to their King
    Manifested all around
    Shout aloud a glorious sound

     

    See the peace in the twilight, glory up above
    Never-ending galaxies, like never stopping love
    And he knows them all by name
    They together sing His fame

     

    See the pow’r in creation—a mountain tow’ring to the sky
    And the tiny lines of detail that lift his name on high
    Craftsmanship by heavenly hands
    Spread his love like grains of sand

    Writing Heroes ♦ Writing Hope // janemareeauthor.com.au

    #46452
    Serenity
    @serenity

    @dakota, that’s beautiful! I cant wait to see more of your stuff!

    lover of our Lord, words, and music as his writing tools
    ENTJ
    LOVES COOKIES, KNIVES, AND MUSIC!!!!

    #46456
    Libby
    @libby

    @jane-maree Your song is so…beautiful!  I love the chorus, most of all this line: Creator, Artist, Author, King.  Just making the connection between all of those attributes and characteristics through your song is so neat.


    @dakota
    Nice going with your song, too!  It does remind me a bit of a hymn, and there’s a lot of truth packed into it.

    So here’s my song.  I’m afraid it’s not a Christian song, necessarily, but it’s a song I wrote when I visited California in June.  Hope you all enjoy – and I’d love feedback!

    Where the water meets the sky
    Blurring the horizon
    Ships are sailing on the clouds
    To the world above.
    Waves are standing still,
    Waiting until
    It fades away;
    Music from the ocean’s shore
    Calls me now to stay.

    Sailboats sway in a waltz with the sea
    Seagulls laugh as they call out to me
    In the sky, so beautifully free.
    Silently, I watch them fly away.

    Twilight rests upon the waves,
    Dancing in the sunlight;
    Aft, abroad, the seabirds fly
    Down the westward road.
    Sun is sinking low,
    Turning to go
    Beyond the sea.
    Night has ended day,
    Washed far away
    Endlessly.

    If you wonder where am I,
    Beyond the sunshine’s glare
    Where the water meets the sky,
    You will find me there.

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #46462
    Jane Maree
    @jane-maree

    @libby Thank you!! It was a song inspired by creation and Psalm 19 “the heavens declare the glory of God.” 😊

    Writing Heroes ♦ Writing Hope // janemareeauthor.com.au

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