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  • #63971
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @k-a-grey Neat! 🙂

    #64231
    Libby
    @libby

    @k-a-grey That is a beautiful picture! 😀 Love it.  And the poem that you wrote is very lovely and true.  I really like it’s simplicity and message. 🙂


    @evelyn
    Island of the World?  Is it a good book?  Would you suggest me to read it?

    And thank you both! 🙂

    I keep writing poetry, tell me if it bugs you please.  Here’s another thing I thought up today.  Haven’t really had the concentration to work on a strictly rhythmic and rhyming poem.

    "Young people, you must pray, for your passions are strong and your wisdom is little."C.H.Spurgeon

    #64236
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @libby I’m not sure how to answer a question like that… I can say that I have never been so moved, or changed, by a book in my life.

    It has a tiny bit language in it, and lots of violence. If you are willing to take that on, I would fully recommend it. 🙂

    #64237
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @libby If you want me to explain/describe it further, I can. xD

    #64239
    Grace
    @h-jones

      Oh my word, all of your poems are breath-taking…


      @kb-writer
      Flurries was amazing. And “Oh, Lord…” oh my word. I don’t even know how to express how beautiful that was.


      @evelyn
      Sealess. Oh my. I can’t even. That is astounding, so much meaning packed into such few words, I just can’t.

      Secretly Hedgehog Jones. Don’t tell anyone.

      #64245
      Evelyn
      @evelyn

      @h-jones Thanks. 🙂

      #64256
      K. A. Grey
      @k-a-grey

        @libby  I could never get tired of reading your poetry, so don’t stop!

        Keep expressing yourself, because you do it in such a beautiful way.  Remember that it’s what David did in Psalms.  His cries and prayers to God still touch millions of people today.   (I’ll keep praying for you.  🙂 )

        "Atticus, he was real nice. . . .”
        “Most people are, Scout, when you finally see them.”

        #64462
        Evelyn
        @evelyn

        Here is another piece I wrote two nights ago, though I’m not sure what to call it yet. 😛

        🙂

        “Oh shame!” cries the birds on high,
        That dive down from their lofty sky,
        “Oh shame that man was not made to fly.”
        The poet sees them laugh and jeer,
        And calls for them to hear,
        “Man may not sprout wings, my friend,”
        “But their hearts were made to soar.”

        #64463
        Evelyn
        @evelyn

        Also, does anyone know the rules of punctuation for dialogue in poetry? If it’s the same person speaking, do you still add quotations at the beginning of each line?


        @libby
        @k-a-grey @h-jones

        #64494
        K. A. Grey
        @k-a-grey

          @evelyn  I think you don’t have to have quotation marks at the beginning of each line as long as it’s the same person.  Just make sure you have them when the person begins speaking, and then again when he finishes.  If the monologue takes up a few paragraphs, you can begin each paragraph with quotation marks but not end with them until he finishes speaking. I hope this was helpful and not confusing. XD

          Nice poem, by the way.

          "Atticus, he was real nice. . . .”
          “Most people are, Scout, when you finally see them.”

          #64515
          Evelyn
          @evelyn

          @k-a-grey Okay, thank you!

          #64609
          Grace
          @h-jones

            @evelyn Ah, I’m sorry that I didn’t answer sooner! As far as quotation marks go, I think that putting a quotation mark at the end of the line, and then another at the beginning of the next line, almost makes it seem like another person is talking. (I didn’t get that at all and I knew what you meant by context, but I’m going on what little I know of grammar. :))

            I.e.,
            “Man may not sprout wings, my friend,
            But their hearts were made to soar.”

            Notice the bold spots if possible. They’re kinda hard to see. xDDDD

            I think it’d make more grammatical sense if you left off the ending quotation on the second last line. I.e.,

            “Man may not sprout wings, my friend,
            “But their hearts were made to soar.”

            Implying that it is the same person speaking, but also having a quotation mark at the beginning of the next line. Which I’m pretty sure is some sort of grammar rule. I could totally be wrong though, and you can very much ignore all of my advice. I’m not an English teacher. 8D

            ALSO! Your poem is SUPER AWESOME! I loved it. (: You are quite the gifted poet.

            • This reply was modified 1 year, 7 months ago by Grace.
            • This reply was modified 1 year, 7 months ago by Grace. Reason: FORGOT TO SAY HOW AWESOME THE POEM WAAASSSS

            Secretly Hedgehog Jones. Don’t tell anyone.

            #64614
            Grace
            @h-jones

              @evelyn @k-a-grey @libby @kb-writer What do y’all think of this poem? I feel like there’s something missing from it, but I don’t know what. Perhaps a solid ending, more metaphorical connections, I don’t know.

              an afternoon betwixt [outside?] the walls,
              a fleeting taste of stolen flight;
              the moon cascading through the falls
              as i take silent through the night.

               

              the broken-down, decaying bricks
              and ivies floating ’round like stars
              can play on minds more mystic tricks
              than liquids from the pubs or bars.

               

              [do I even need that stanza? ^ maybe I should replace it with something different; it seems out of place]

               

              o rain! i pray, fall down on me
              and hide my tears among your drops,
              e’er twinkling through the lowest tree,
              please drip – and drip – and never stop.

               

              i wonder if the kind of faith
              it takes for you to fall so free
              will save me from myself, a wraith
              of everything i used to be.

              • This reply was modified 1 year, 7 months ago by Grace.

              Secretly Hedgehog Jones. Don’t tell anyone.

              #64704
              Evelyn
              @evelyn

              @h-jones *gasps* I love your poem. 😀

              And thanks for the help!

              #64896
              K. A. Grey
              @k-a-grey

                @h-jones  That is so beautiful.  I like the way you left out the capitalization;  it’s always neat to be able to create something beyond the limits of English grammar.  One thing I noticed was slightly incongruous was how it started as an “afternoon betwixt the walls”  and suddenly became the “moon cascading… through the night.”  As for the second stanza, at first I thought the last line seemed a little out of place, but reading the whole thing, it kinda ties in with” a wraith of everything i used to be.”

                Overall, great job!

                "Atticus, he was real nice. . . .”
                “Most people are, Scout, when you finally see them.”

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